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    • Whitney Simms
      Whitney Simms SVS OG last edited by

      @Jonas-Zavacky Love the embrace. I really get the emotion from it. Love the sway with her hair and body leaning with the field going a different way.

      Looks like she is going to fall. To me, she needs to be a bit more stable. I don't want her to completely fall over.

      I also like this color palette. I love a fall blue!

      Can't wait to see if develop!

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      • Jonas Zavacky
        Jonas Zavacky @Whitney Simms last edited by

        @whitney-simms Thank you! Yes I see what you mean.. I will try to play with her posing to balance her. Thank you for poiting out.

        But I have a bunch of other ideas too so lets see If this will be the one I will further develop.

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        • jasonandroosmith
          jasonandroosmith last edited by

          I like her smile. She looks content.

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          • Johanna Kim
            Johanna Kim SVS OG @Jonas Zavacky last edited by

            @jonas-zavacky I like this a lot, the energy of your lines, the feeling of the fall wind. Your idea to have her holding her hair is good, but you can also emphasize the wind by showing even more movement with her hair and skirt. You might also consider adding fall leaves being blown. I also like the way her eyes are closed against the wind. It lets us focus less on her eyes and more on the signs of the season.

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            • Jonas Zavacky
              Jonas Zavacky @Johanna Kim last edited by

              @johanna-kim Thank you! great points.

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              • PoppyK
                PoppyK @Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                @jonas-zavacky Nice! I like the looseness and the smile, it’s like a secret smile. I love a windy illustration, you can have so much fun with movement, which I think you’ve done really nicely with the hair and the plants. The only thing that’s throwing me off is the hair and plants are flowing one way but the skirt seems to be pressing into her the other way..?

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                • Jonas Zavacky
                  Jonas Zavacky @PoppyK last edited by

                  @poppyk Thank you!! Hmmm, that's true... I did that mainly because of appeal.. but it doesn't makes much sense (maybe if the wind goes all over the place)

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                  • Jonas Zavacky
                    Jonas Zavacky last edited by Jonas Zavacky

                    another sketch! I am thinking about making this one or the girl on a windy day. Normally I would go with the one I posted first, but I want to go outside my comfort zone and draw something more towards children books. I am thinking about children books for quite a time now, but I never really drawn children stuff.

                    the idea behind this is that Julia comes from outside where is windy weather and she is cold and cant wait to get warm tea so she is in rush to get off her shoes
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                    • Jonas Zavacky
                      Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                      Pushed it a bit further. Made linework and value layout. What are your thoughts on that? I am not sure by the values much. Thank you for any comment

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                      • Elizabeth Rose
                        Elizabeth Rose last edited by

                        Love that you are trying to challenge yourself. I Also love the description you put for this one.

                        Would be neat to somehow extend the drawing to the side and add a scene of a cup of hot tea on a table or a kettle on the stove or something like that. Just an idea

                        Can’t wait to see where you go with this!

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                        • Jonas Zavacky
                          Jonas Zavacky @Elizabeth Rose last edited by

                          @squirrelsize Oh yes, that can help with clarity in the picture! Thanks a lot 🙂

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                          • JudeKillory
                            JudeKillory last edited by

                            I like how the pumpkins are stowed away. Makes me want to see more gourds hanging out. I like that you’re challenging yourself too. This forum is a safe space to throw your art out there and get constructive feedback, I think it may be my favorite thing about svs.

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                            • Jonas Zavacky
                              Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                              Thank you for so much feedback! I love this forum. @Squirrelsize yes I think extending it a bit helped it and @JudeKill I add 3 more gourds to the bottom, but maybe there can be more hehe.

                              anyway, what do you think about where it is heading 🙂 Open to any feedback.
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                              • Elizabeth Rose
                                Elizabeth Rose last edited by

                                Yes! That extra scene to the side allows the eye to flow over the drawing way better! Love this dude!

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                                • Jonas Zavacky
                                  Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                                  Showing this one more time in value phase. Just to make sure the focal point is clear to you guys and overall if it feels right.
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                                  • Jonas Zavacky
                                    Jonas Zavacky last edited by Jonas Zavacky

                                    Ok, finally I think the values are in a place that I can move further on so I decided to finally work on color (also I changed the background because I was very unhappy with the last one)

                                    This is the first shot and I definitely want to explore more color schemes. but do you guys think I am going the right way? Thanks again for every comment. You are the best!
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                                    • Jonas Zavacky
                                      Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                                      I played with the colors more and tried a cooler variant too which I probably like more than the more warm one.

                                      But what do you guys think?
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                                      • TessaW
                                        TessaW @Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                                        @jonas-zavacky I like the cooler variant as well

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                                        • Elizabeth Rose
                                          Elizabeth Rose last edited by

                                          Dude! Looking great! I love the changes you did in the side room scene. I like the second one with the green cabinets because of the warm yellow lighting. Definitely feels warm in that room.
                                          I like the first one with the red in the cabinets bouncing off the color of her scarf. Good stuff bro

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                                          • chrisaakins
                                            chrisaakins last edited by

                                            Looks great. Man...I like both. I think I like the cool colors on her more, though.

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