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    2ND TAKE- Misunderstood Monster WIP

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    • Branden Brushett
      Branden Brushett last edited by Branden Brushett

      I was totally sold on #1 when I first saw it. But the more I think about it, and the more I look at #3, it makes more sense story-wise. I think the window lighting is such a cool idea and it looks great. But it's also taking away from the story and for me, it that's cute little kids sad face not understanding why his parents are upset at something he worked so hard on for them. So for me right now, the window lighting is making me focus on the drawing he did. Which in a way, is fine, but I think more focus on the kids face the better. With no distractions in the background.

      With the window outline, the drawing, the parents scolding him.. there's too much going on for me. So that's why I think #3 is working better for the story.

      Also, emphasize the dragon/dino outfit more. I didn't notice it until someone else mentioned it. And with misunderstood monster being the topic, it's so perfect.

      Branden Brushett
      3D Game Artist/Writer/Illustrator
      Portfolio: https://brandenbrushett.wixsite.com/portfolio
      Instagram: www.instagram.com/picturebookjourney

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      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by Nyrryl Cadiz

        @Branden-Brushett Oh, dear... i’m really sorry, Braden. I was really busy working on the piece that i wasn’t able to read your comment. I’ve already painted the illustration using lighting #1 and i’m really satisfied with it. I’ve attached the illustration below. I hope the kid’s expression still reads through. Thank you so much for your input. Please don’t think I’m completely disregarding what you guys think. I may not execute your comments now but i’ll surely remember and re-enforce them in the future.

        Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
        Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
        YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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        • Nyrryl  Cadiz
          Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

          Hi, everybody! Here’s the almost-final illustration. Please let me know if there are some things that i need to work on more. Thank you very much. I hope you like it.

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          Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
          Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
          YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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          • Nyrryl  Cadiz
            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @KathrynAdebayo last edited by Nyrryl Cadiz

            @kathrynadebayo hi! Thank you so much for your support. Yeah, sometimes i also get so technical with how things look that i get so nit-picky and frustrated. It’s nice to bend reality a bit sometimes and experiment with whacky ideas. I wish you the best with your work as well!

            Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
            Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
            YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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            • Nyrryl  Cadiz
              Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

              Here’s another version of the illustration where instead of the writing on the wall saying ‘Happy Anniversary’, it’s ‘I love Mom and Dad’. I think it works better.

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              Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
              Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
              YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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              • Eli
                Eli @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                @nyrrylcadiz I love this final version. It looks amazing and kind of breaks my heart a little! So well done. I think it works well without any words at all--I like the storytelling of just the picture of the happy family juxtaposed with the scolding, shadowy parents and confused, sad kid...

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                • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                  Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Eli last edited by

                  @eli hi, Eli! I’m really glad you like it! I’ve been doubting my skills lately and to have someone appreciate my work really makes me feel a bit better inside.Thank you.

                  Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                  Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                  YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                  • StudioLooong
                    StudioLooong last edited by

                    One small thing to consider would be changing the color of the gray/brown outlines on the crayon drawings. Right now if I were to see the car, tree, sun, or house out of context I would tell you that they looked like they were colored-in by a kid, but not necessarily drawn by one. They're kind of giving off a coloring book vibe. If you change the outline to the same colors as the scribbles and maybe make the outlines a little messier I think it will look more like a kid that size drew them. Here's a cool article on kid's art at different stages of development: http://www.artjunction.org/young_in_art.pdf

                    Taylor Woolley
                    (Formerly Taylor Ackerman / StudioLooong)


                    Website: www.woolleystories.com
                    Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/woolleystories/

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                    • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                      Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @StudioLooong last edited by

                      @studiolooong hi! Yes, i see what you mean. I’l definitely work on that. Thank you so much!

                      Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                      Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                      YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                        I did a quick edit on the piece. Here it is. I removed the brown outlines on the wall sribbles and got rid of the words. I hope you guys like it. Please let me know what you guys think. Thanks.

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                        Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                        Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                        YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                        • KathrynAdebayo
                          KathrynAdebayo last edited by

                          Amazing!!!!

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                          • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @KathrynAdebayo last edited by

                            @kathrynadebayo Thanks, Katheryn!

                            Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                            Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                            YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                            • Eli
                              Eli @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                              @nyrrylcadiz It looks SO GOOD

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                              • Gary Wilkinson
                                Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                                Great work @nyrrylcadiz ! That kid is super cute. I do think that the text above the heart works better but both are great 😃

                                www.garywilkinsonart.com
                                www.instagram.com/gwillustration/
                                www.twitter.com/GWillustration

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                                • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                  Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                                  @eli Thank you so much! I’m very happy you like it.

                                  Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                                  Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                                  YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                                  • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                    Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                                    @gary-wilkinson Thank you! It means a lot coming from you.

                                    Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                                    Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                                    YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                                    • Ailantan
                                      Ailantan last edited by Ailantan

                                      I love your picture, its splendid! ❤

                                      https://www.instagram.com/ailantanart/

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                                      • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                        Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Ailantan last edited by

                                        @ailantan Thank you so much!

                                        Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                                        Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                                        YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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                                        • DLArmantrout
                                          DLArmantrout last edited by

                                          This painting looks great! It's making me feel guilty for getting mad at my kids. Very effective!

                                          SVS name: @dlarmantrout
                                          Instagram: @dlarmantrout

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                                          • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @DLArmantrout last edited by Nyrryl Cadiz

                                            @dlarmantrout wow... To know that your work could reach other people on a deeper level is very moving. Thank you so much!

                                            Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                                            Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                                            YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

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