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    • jennyeickbush
      jennyeickbush last edited by

      Maybe you can take the best of both worlds! I'm really responding to the roundness in the shapes of the first composition. So maybe you can take those shapes but rework the expressions so that the male seems to be more focused. He can still have a playful and goofy "WOW WOW WOW" feeling, but I think it should be more focused on the female. Really creative idea! I like the concept a lot!

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      • avfarrar
        avfarrar @Erin.Cortese last edited by

        @inkandspatter I think that in the first picture the bird's faces are definitely cuter and the bodies shaped a little better than the second, but in the second version the birds are more focused on each other and captures their emotions better. I hope that's helpful. Your picture looks really fun!

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        • Erin.Cortese
          Erin.Cortese Moderator last edited by

          @jennymwine @avfarrar That is very helpful! Maybe I don’t need to choose between them, but combine what I like from each!

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          • Erin.Cortese
            Erin.Cortese Moderator last edited by

            Ok, so here are my updated seagulls. Thank you so much to all of you for you advice, you have been an amazing help! Critiques welcome as always!

            Love-new.jpg

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            • ?
              A Former User last edited by

              Sorry i'm a little late but I also like the first one like you, it's definitely much better now that you've added the eyelids but i preferred it when the male seagulls' head was slightly to the side so you could see both eyes, you can give him eyebrows then to add to his smitten expression - like one up and one down eyebrow if you know what i mean? The female's face is brilliant πŸ™‚

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              • Erin.Cortese
                Erin.Cortese Moderator @Guest last edited by

                @hannahmccaffery Thank you, I was focusing so much on the expression, I missed the second eye. Great idea with the eyebrows, I will give that a try!

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                • Erin.Cortese
                  Erin.Cortese Moderator last edited by

                  Linework finished!
                  Line_art.jpg

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                  • jennyeickbush
                    jennyeickbush @Erin.Cortese last edited by

                    @inkandspatter Yay! Great job! It's looking so good! I love what you did with the male bird. I think you made some really strong changes πŸ™‚

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                    • JerrySketchyArt
                      JerrySketchyArt @Erin.Cortese last edited by

                      @inkandspatter Looking good! The male bird's expression turned out great. The lower left and upper right bands on the life ring look a little off center to me. Might want to fix that if it wasn't intentional.

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                      • Sas
                        Sas last edited by

                        Ohhh wow this is so awesome! Love the LUV BRD license plate too! Curious to see what colors you will use. Keep up the good work

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                        • Erin.Cortese
                          Erin.Cortese Moderator last edited by

                          Here are my values for this composition. I don't have much experience with value studies, but I'm really hoping to improve my painting and colour skills, so I figure creating values studies before painting is probably a good habit to get into.

                          values.jpg

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                            cbrocke last edited by

                            This looks great! Love it!

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                            • Erin.Cortese
                              Erin.Cortese Moderator last edited by Erin.Cortese

                              As I said before, I struggle with colour. So here are some colour studies I did for this comp, any feedback or advice is appreciated! ☺

                              ***The blue sky on number 2 should not be so vibrant - Procreate really sucks for exporting certain colours inaccuratley.

                              Values_2.jpg

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                              • Heather Boyd
                                Heather Boyd @Erin.Cortese last edited by Heather Boyd

                                @inkandspatter 2 has more colour contrast with the orange so I like that one the best! But perhaps the 3rd green hill in number 2 if that may work.

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                                • Chip Valecek
                                  Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Erin.Cortese last edited by

                                  @inkandspatter I agree with @Heather-Boyd I like 2. It stood out right away to me.


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                                  • Sas
                                    Sas @Erin.Cortese last edited by

                                    @inkandspatter same as the other two here above :face_with_stuck-out_tongue: but I like the chemical waste dripping out in picture four alot as well. Maybe add some shadings underneath the rubble too to make it more 3D-ish?

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                                    • Erin.Cortese
                                      Erin.Cortese Moderator last edited by

                                      Here is my final, finished not perfect πŸ™‚
                                      Thank so much for all your feedback and help, I learned so much because of it!

                                      Love-ec.jpg

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                                      • avfarrar
                                        avfarrar @Erin.Cortese last edited by

                                        @inkandspatter Great job! This turned out nice. πŸ‘

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                                        • Sas
                                          Sas @Erin.Cortese last edited by

                                          @inkandspatter It turned out great! Thank you for letting us come on your journey πŸ˜ƒ

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