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    After 'Moment Before' vid crits - Dino Do-over

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    • Maureen
      Maureen SVS OG last edited by

      I was thrilled with Lee's video critiques -- thank you @Lee-White! -- for the April contest.
      For my entry - dinosaurs on the roller coaster, he said that instead of the straight-forward view, he would want to see a better angle – diagonally -- to activate the space and make it more dramatic.
      I skipped the background since this was just an exercise to see if I could do what he suggested.
      I redrew/repainted them but "hope" I now have the better angle.
      Here's the before and after.
      The Moment Before_MaureenBF-Original.jpg
      Moment Before_Dino-Do-over_MaureenBF.jpg

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      • animatosoor
        animatosoor @Maureen last edited by

        @Maureen Hi Maureen, I really like this do-over. The new angle makes it easier for us to read their poses and expressions.

        I personally like the lack of a background in this new version. A hint of some other structures in the distance and even a few clouds could be great additions to lend this picture more depth. That said, many picture book illustrations do well with plain white backgrounds to emphasise the characters' actions and expressions, and that could work here, too.

        https://www.instagram.com/sooryajart/

        The Beatles: "Roll up, roll up for the Mystery Tour!"

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        • Maureen
          Maureen SVS OG @animatosoor last edited by

          Thank you, @animatosoor It's good to get feedback, especially the kind that lets me know I am heading in the right direction!

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          • Jon Anderson
            Jon Anderson SVS OG last edited by

            Changing the camera made a huge difference and leaving the background white actually adds to the suspension of the drop. Your roller coaster is instantly recognizable and the silhouette on white along with the dino’s expressions makes it feel as though they are about to drop from the clouds. @Good job!

            instagram.com/jonandersonillu

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            • Maureen
              Maureen SVS OG @Jon Anderson last edited by

              Thank you, @Jon-Anderson It's good to know that a critique really can help a person make progress and see things they could not before. I like that "changing the camera" idea since I love photography, too.

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              • Coley
                Coley last edited by

                It makes a big difference! Much more dynamic! Awesome job

                https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                • Maureen
                  Maureen SVS OG @Coley last edited by

                  Thanks, @Coley for the nice comments.

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