WIP entry

phoenix yip

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Hey everyone, I’m still working on this, but anyone got any advice or critiques? Thank you!

phoenix yip

Sorry, the res is pretty bad

braden H

Is there any particular thing you'd like feedback on? Any one thing that you think isn't working?

phoenix yip

@Braden-Hallett What do you think about the style, and rendering. Or my focal points and composition? Thanks!

phoenix yip

I worked on it a little more, what do you think?

ArtofAleksey

@phoenix-yip the dark areas in the image create large dark masses that pull away from the little vehicle the light is shining on.

phoenix yip

@Aleksey Oh ok, do you mean the very foreground?

ArtofAleksey

@phoenix-yip several places. The foreground, the trees that have the light beam passing behind them (the dark in front of the light creates several spots of contrast that are almost as high as the the ship) and also the 2 big trees in the middle create kind of big triangle thats pointing up, as well as a few other trees creating those Xs and triangles that are kind of averting my eye away from that little ship and towards the top of the image.

phoenix yip

@Aleksey Oh I see, I'll try to fix that. Thanks a lot!

braden H

@phoenix-yip My biggest peeve is that the branch in the lower left foreground is creating enough of a tangent with the vehicle to be confusing. At first read it seems like it could be a flower, or mushroom instead of a vehicle.

I'd also make those engines nice and glowy

chrisaakins

@phoenix-yip I like your setting very much. The forest looks immense and deep and dark. I am instantly drawn in. However, I confess that I had a hard time reading what the spaceship was at first. I thought it was a bleeding rat head??? I had to read the comments to figure it out. I think that it could stand to be a little larger and a little more defined to be more readable as a speeder. I also agree with @Braden-Hallett about the "glowy" lights. (Braden, is that really a word?)

Keep it up. It is a nice composition.

phoenix yip

@Braden-Hallett Thank you very much, I was trying to create an implied line with the branch, but i think youre right, it is a tangent. I will also work on the engine more. Thank you!

phoenix yip

@chrisaakins I agree, Thank you, this helps a lot!