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    • demotlj
      demotlj SVS OG @TessaW last edited by

      @TessaW Thanks. There are some other tangents too I have to clean up. There’s a lot of lines in this one!

      Laurie DeMott
      instagram.com/demotlj

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      • chrisaakins
        chrisaakins @demotlj last edited by

        @demotlj Looking good! I think this is a real improvement in composition. I wouldn't crop the foot though.

        Chris Akins
        www.chrisakinsart.com
        www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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        • demotlj
          demotlj SVS OG @chrisaakins last edited by

          @chrisaakins I agree about the crop. I uncropped it after I put this up which also gives me more room for the other dancers I’m putting in.

          Laurie DeMott
          instagram.com/demotlj

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          • demotlj
            demotlj SVS OG last edited by demotlj

            Is it clear now that the bison and other animals are dancing? If so, I think I’m done with the linework unless you see any issues. There are still a few tangents but I’ll trace it again when I put it onto watercolor and fix those, and try to make the line weight better.

            Then comes the agony of choosing colors 😐

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            Laurie DeMott
            instagram.com/demotlj

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            • chrisaakins
              chrisaakins @demotlj last edited by

              @demotlj looks great!

              Chris Akins
              www.chrisakinsart.com
              www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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              • Coley
                Coley last edited by

                I have been enjoying this thread. the re-start on this piece is absolutely wonderful!!!! The characters are very endearing too.

                https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                • demotlj
                  demotlj SVS OG @Coley last edited by

                  @Coley Thanks so much. It took me so long to do the piece the first time around that I wasn't sure I wanted to come back to it so it's encouraging to know it's working better.

                  Laurie DeMott
                  instagram.com/demotlj

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                  • demotlj
                    demotlj SVS OG last edited by

                    Do either of these color schemes work? The bison and prairie chicken will be warm browns and all the other animals are mostly cooler browns so I wasn’t sure whether to do stay with a analogous colors for the dance hall or go with the complimentary greens. If neither are working, let me know and I’ll go back to the drawing board.

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                    Laurie DeMott
                    instagram.com/demotlj

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                      Joanne Roberts @demotlj last edited by

                      @demotlj Great job so far in your reworking. I'm having trouble judging if the cool green color scheme works better because that foreground bison is soooo dark. How is this piece matching up with the value thumbnails from your planning stage? Also having trouble because the black working lines of the background details are so stark right now in the all-brown version Maybe you'll have an easier time deciding if you temporarily tone down the line drawing a bit? I love your characters' gestures BTW.

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                      • demotlj
                        demotlj SVS OG last edited by

                        I made the bison that dark in the color study because I'm going to do it in traditional watercolor and I always have problems with my watercolors being too pale so I pushed the sketch so I'd remember. I'll try lightening her up as well as the lines tomorrow and reposting. Thanks for looking at it.

                        Laurie DeMott
                        instagram.com/demotlj

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                        • TessaW
                          TessaW last edited by

                          Color is so subjective, but I like the brown version between the two. I think a green background could look just as attractive, but for my personal preference, I'd like a warmer green.

                          Website: www.tessawrathall.com

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                          • demotlj
                            demotlj SVS OG @TessaW last edited by

                            @TessaW Who am I to go against the opinion of an SVS champion? 🙂 Seriously, I do not trust my color sense at all and if you like the warmer colors, I will go with the warmer colors assuming the chaos of life right now leaves me any time to keep working on this. Thanks.

                            Laurie DeMott
                            instagram.com/demotlj

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