Critique please: little fishing girl.
-
@xin-li these are amazing! Love them
the only thing I’d point out is that the expression on the second one could be more defined. I think the problem is with the eyebrows. She looks a bit angry, but I think you were going for a focused kind of look, right? -
@xin-li they look pretty great!! My main concern on the character consistency would just be the face in the first illo, it looks a bit more round while the others square off a bit more on the sides. Also I think the eyes are bigger in protein there than in the others.
You could always try overlapping the images with one of them at 50% opacity (or more) and check details that way!
The little girl looks especially cute!
-
@xin-li Hi Xin Li I think they are terrific. On the first one, the top of the head is bigger and the left eye needs just a tiny adjustment to make it smaller and lower both eyes a tiny bit.
On the second one the eyebrows can be a bit lighter in color. -
Hei, everyone. Thank you so much for the feedback. I try to incorprate as much as I can without re-drawing the whole thing :-).
I did these with traditonal pencil, and colored digitally. Now I see the challenge of working traditonally - it is a lot harder to make bigger changes without starting over again. I did re-drawing hands and feet digitally, it was a lot harder to match the texture. Hmm, I could use a lightbox just redrawing the hands and feet on paper... I will try that method next time for doing bigger changes next time.@carlianne I definitely should remember your tips in the sketching phase next time.
-
The changes look perfectly integrated. This little series is so cute and feels so genuine to how kids play! Love it.
-
These are fantastic! I was looking at them for several minutes when I noticed that the blanket in the first image turns into water in the second and third images. It was an "Aha!" moment. Very clever. And I love the giraffe to bits.
-
@xin-li That's great!
-
@TessaW Thank you so much. I am glad to hear that.
@baileymvidler So happy that you notice the blanket. I was not sure what I should do in the 2rd and 3rd image in the beginning. I had one version I drew a more detailed blanket, but then it became to distracting. So I truned it into a simple block of color to represent the imaginary water.
@Mara-Price Thank you so much. -
@xin-li I don't have a critique, I just wanted to say that I think these are so fun & fabulous (and will be a great addition to your portfolio)!
-
The character design is very adorable! Good use of color.
I've noticed that the character's proportions within the last two images, felt off. especially with the hair line and hands. The hands in the first image are larger than in other images.
I recommend going back and deconstructing your first desing and examining the proportions. Then reworking the the last two images with your deconstruced design as a reference.
Overall, It's a cute story with a girl and her little griaffe friend. Keep up the great work!
-
I don’t have a critique, Just wanted to tell you I love these! Great expressions and so playful!
-
@xin-li your illos are lovely! Just one small thought, maybe you can have a more diversed background. Peaceful ocean, ocean with big waves, etc. Portfolio is somewhere that we want to use limited space and show as much of our talents / as many aspects as possible.
-
@idid good point. It is hard with those spot images though. As the focus is on the character, if there are to much going on in the background, it might be distracting. I will definitely think of a very different scene for the next set of iamges I create so there will be some diversity.
Although I agree diversity is an important aspect of building portfolio, I am actually not 100% agree of putting too much emphasis on showing as many aspects as possible of our talents in the portfolio. It depends a bit on your goal. I want to my portfolio relects subjects I am interested in only, so I will have a bigger chance to get projects I want to do. I heard many editors are very literal: if you have dinasaurs in your portfolio, you propably get projects that you draw dinasaurs.
