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    The Elves and the Shoemaker - Triptych Feedback?

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    • baileyvidler
      baileyvidler last edited by

      Hi, y'all! I'm stumped and was wondering if I could get your thoughts?

      This is going to be a spot triptych depicting elves making a pair of shoes (from the story of the Elves and the Shoemaker.) I've sketched out five segments of the story, but I need to narrow it down to three. And I'm having trouble picking which three most effectively tell the story.

      I think 5 is really important because it shows the finished shoe. But 2 and 4 are redundant because they both depict hammering, and 1 and 3 both depict sewing. Which ones do you think are the most important?

      Thank you so much!

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      5.jpg

      Bailey Vidler
      Portfolio: baileyvidler.com

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      • baileyvidler
        baileyvidler last edited by

        I forgot to mention. Basically, I'm thinking it should either go 1, 4, 5 or 2, 3, 5. But I can't decide between the two options.

        Bailey Vidler
        Portfolio: baileyvidler.com

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          Mara Price @baileyvidler last edited by

          @baileymvidler I agree 2,3,5 🙂 I love them!

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          • Dima Eichhorn
            Dima Eichhorn @baileyvidler last edited by

            @baileymvidler they are all super cute, but I agree with you- 2,3,5 are the best.

            https://www.instagram.com/dima_eichhorn/

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            • arielleli
              arielleli last edited by

              I can tell from the sketches that it’s going to be so fun! I can’t wait to see more 🙂

              Arielle Li
              www.arielleli.com
              www.instagram.com/arielleli.art/

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              • Neha Rawat
                Neha Rawat last edited by

                2, 3, 5 for me too! Great gestures!

                https://www.nrbstudio.in/
                https://www.instagram.com/nrbstudio.in

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                  Shyam Sailus last edited by

                  2,3,5 for me..

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                    Diane Kond last edited by

                    I love them all!!! In 4 - maybe to add a little anticipation (sorry for low opacity).

                    shoemaker.png

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                    • Rachel Horne
                      Rachel Horne @baileyvidler last edited by

                      @baileymvidler they're all wonderful but I like 2,4 and 5 - I think maybe 4 needs the swing a bit more emphasised, like he might topple over? I'd like to see them finished 🙂

                      www.rachel-horne.com
                      instagram.com/rachel_horne_art

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                      • baileyvidler
                        baileyvidler last edited by

                        Thank you @Mara-Price, @Dima-Eichhorn, @arielleli, @Neha-Rawat, @Shyam-Sailus for responding!

                        @Rachel-Horne, yeah, I agree with you that the swing could be pushed further. @Diane-Kond's edit is a good idea. I will try to show the elf struggling with the big hammer.

                        Thanks so much, everyone!

                        Bailey Vidler
                        Portfolio: baileyvidler.com

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