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    Any last minute advice for Bongo and Clyde?

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    • Kevin Longueil
      Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Chip Valecek last edited by

      @Chip-Valecek Thank you for the feedback Chip!

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      • theprairiefox
        theprairiefox @Kevin Longueil last edited by

        @Kevin-Longueil this is truly a fun piece!

        I had one thought, I wonder if you could lighten up the bird? When I looked at the whole picture together the bird has almost as much weight as Bongo. Which I don't think was the intention. I wonder if you lightened his value or made it a smaller bird if the visual weight would lessen?

        Just a thought. Beautifully rendered piece.

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        • Jeremy Ross
          Jeremy Ross @Kevin Longueil last edited by

          Hi @Kevin-Longueil, this is so good!

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          • Kevin Longueil
            Kevin Longueil SVS OG @theprairiefox last edited by

            @theprairiefox Thank you for the feedback! My thinking on the Toucan is that he is the part of the story that i would add as an illustrator that is not in the text - In this particular panel he would be given equal weight to Clyde and Bongo - the bird would be in every panel as a minor element until the last where he would be prominent again where Bongo is wondering how he would get back ..as he looks thoughtfully at the now indignant Toucan. Where bongo gets the feather that he uses to escape Clyde seemed like a fun idea. That was my thinking anyways 🙂 I really appreciate the feedback!
            @Jeremy-Ross Thank Jeremy!

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            • MirkaH
              MirkaH last edited by

              I think it all looks fantastic and the leaves being more sketchy dont bother me. What bothers me is the crocodiles mouth. It seems like its made out of rubber with no underlying bone structure in it. This is coming too late to fix it anymore, but for next time, I would make the mouth more natural, as everything else is drawn with reference to reality.

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              • Kevin Longueil
                Kevin Longueil SVS OG @MirkaH last edited by

                @MirkaH Not too late at all! - you are right it is too floppy!.. @Braxton mentioned it before and it seemed ok to me back then...but you are both right - i'll straighten out the snout a bit - Thank you 🙂

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                • Kevin Longueil
                  Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                  @MirkaH @Braxton Better? Still working on legs and such,,but i think the mouth is better - Thank you !
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                  • MirkaH
                    MirkaH last edited by

                    Its better, but still distorted as if some one is peeling the top and bottom jaw open of a rubber toy. Both sides of the jaws should be basically straight with just a curvy edge on the mouthline.

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                    • MirkaH
                      MirkaH last edited by

                      The monkey and toucan are spot of. I love the little cheeky smile on the monkey.

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                      • Kevin Longueil
                        Kevin Longueil SVS OG @MirkaH last edited by

                        @MirkaH Thank You Mirka! I definitely appreciate your input - i am going to leave it a bit rubbery ..i feel like it is a bit too real without it - thank you again - it is definitely better than it was 🙂

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                        • Kevin Longueil
                          Kevin Longueil SVS OG @MirkaH last edited by Kevin Longueil

                          @MirkaH Not sure if i have ever mentioned but i am blown away by your prints!! They are So good!

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                          • Pamela Fraley
                            Pamela Fraley SVS OG last edited by

                            Wow! This is so cool. I like the long format.

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                            • MirkaH
                              MirkaH @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                              @Kevin-Longueil Thank you, I've always loved your drawings, you have such great mark making skills.

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                              • Kevin Longueil
                                Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Pamela Fraley last edited by

                                @Pamela-Fraley Thank you Pamela!
                                @MirkaH Thank you Mirka!

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                                • Coley
                                  Coley last edited by

                                  The amount that I love this knows no bounds! Omg it's awesome! Sooooo jealous LoL

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                                  • Kevin Longueil
                                    Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Coley last edited by

                                    @Coley Wow! Thank you so much Coley!!

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