Feedback needed

Nyrryl Cadiz

@Matthew-Oberdier hi, I’m really sorry but I have very little time so I’ll keep it short and sweet.

Bobo looks indiferrent. He looks like he doesn’t care he’s losing his yoyo. He even looks like he’s purposefully throwing away his yoyo. Improve his gesture and expression. Give Bobo a devastated/panicked expression. Draw Bobo leaning forward, arms stretched, trying to catch the yoyo.
Green title on green background. Maybe choose another bg color to make the text pop.

I’m excited to see where you’ll take this.

Matthew Oberdier

@Nyrryl-Cadiz THanks for the feedback.
What do you think about this pose?

Matthew Oberdier

Pose #2

Matthew Oberdier

I'm a little keen on 2 because foreshortening.

Jacy13

@Matthew-Oberdier I prefer the 2nd pose. It definitely feels like he's in distress over his yoyo in this one!

Nyrryl Cadiz

@Matthew-Oberdier 2 looks great

Griffin McPherson

The first thing I notice is that it doesn’t seem like the yo yo is lost it just seems like he has dropped it. Unfortunately this would probably require a total redesign.

I also noticed that the background is taking up too much of the image. The background is not important and doesn’t add much here and for that reason I think the house and Bobo should be more at the center of attention. Bring them into the composition more. But this may not be necessary if you do a redesign as I mentioned before. Hope this helps

Matthew Oberdier

@Griffin if the background lacks intertest, seems like the easiest thing to do would be to the add something interesting back there. Personally, I like the balance of the composition and didn't want to make a static, centered comp.

Griffin McPherson

It’s not the the background is uninteresting it’s that’s feel like it’s competing a little bit too much with more important parts of the image. After thinking about it some more I think just removing the bird in the tree might fix this unless the bird is an important part of the story

Matthew Oberdier

Thank you all for the feedback. I'm pretty happy with the finish.