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    • HeatherBouteneff
      HeatherBouteneff @ABCre8ive last edited by

      @ABCre8ive totally in progress, it was just going to be a quick project but I really got into it lol

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      • HeatherBouteneff
        HeatherBouteneff @Valerie Light last edited by

        @Valerie-Light thank you! That book looks awesome! Working on this has made me want to take a vacation even more lol

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        • HeatherBouteneff
          HeatherBouteneff last edited by

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          My progress for today, it changed a lot! I want to finish the saddle a bit, and Ive been trying to figure out Will Terry’s color dodge layer trick. Ive seen it in so many videos now but I can’t quite figure it out for some reason.

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          • Niels
            Niels last edited by

            I really like the new version! A few words of critique though; it feels to me that the shadow of the left character is positioned wrong. The way the center character looks, it feels like she is looking straight ahead, but the shadow says the left character is positioned way more to the back. I feel like moving the shadow a bit more down (almost touching the cactus) would remedy this. And somehow I feel the right most cactus should be moved a bit more to the lower right (above the horses tail) to get an overlap with the cat to suggest depth. And currently the witches hat and the cactus are almost the same height, where I think that one should be tallest (preferably the main character).

            The colours really bring the scene to life, and remind me of Arizona’s dry heat.

            Instagram: www.instagram.com/novanbergen/

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            • HeatherBouteneff
              HeatherBouteneff @Niels last edited by

              @Niels it was way wrong, I am so bad at cast shadows outdoors. I'm working through the svs class on shadows because of that. For some reason my brain goes all "math? NOPE" even though it's not math. 1500x500.jpg
              I had some feedback from a friend on twitter asking what this was for and I said I just wanted a better banner for twitter and my website, which kind of put into perspective what I should be doing with it. A lot of people didn't understand the little cat on his own horse either. So I ended up with this, although this copy of it became weirdly blurry and I don't know why. Maybe a procreate thing I need to learn.
              The main thing I got from this is that I want to visit Arizona when things get better, or New Mexico!

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              • KathrynAdebayo
                KathrynAdebayo last edited by

                That little lizard in the foreground is so awesome. 🙂

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                • Freya Chakour
                  Freya Chakour last edited by

                  I think you made it work very well in the end!! Love the typo and it really feels like a header now, more than an illustration. Also I think you moved the girl a bit away from the center of the image and that makes it so much more dynamic! beautiful work ❤ love the lizard also and the cow has such a cure expression

                  https://www.instagram.com/fyra.c/
                  Portfolio: https://www.artstation.com/fyrac

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                  • Morten Christiansen
                    Morten Christiansen last edited by

                    It seems slightly cramped space wise, since a lot of details touch the edge of the image in this last version. Is this intentional? I would try to add a bit of space at the top and bottom of the image - not much, just enough that the hooves, hat, wing and tail do not touch the edge.

                    Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/mortenchristiansenart/
                    DeviantArt: https://www.deviantart.com/mortenchristiansen

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                    • Jeannelle
                      Jeannelle last edited by

                      This looks great. I like the changes you've made. 🙂 Something I would change, if it were up to me, is that the reddish strip of land seems to take up a lot of attention and I think it's supposed to be on the girl and the flying cow. So I would suggest to make it a more neutral color. There's also a tangent on the horses' front legs so a bit of adjustment there would help. I like your lettering though, it's really pretty.

                      instagram: https://www.instagram.com/jeannellepita/
                      website: http://jeannellepita.com/

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                      • HeatherBouteneff
                        HeatherBouteneff @KathrynAdebayo last edited by

                        @KathrynAdebayo I have ridiculously fond memories of trying to catch horny toads as a kid, he def has that personality of one lol

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                        • HeatherBouteneff
                          HeatherBouteneff @Freya Chakour last edited by

                          @Freya-Chakour My grandparents had cattle growing up and my brother showed me the old ledgers from vaccination weekends, I had covered the margins in cows. They are really just so much more mischievous than people expect!

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                          • HeatherBouteneff
                            HeatherBouteneff @Morten Christiansen last edited by

                            @Morten-Christiansen you're totally right, I had to go a little too far in the opposite way to fix it but I had trouble resizing it to the exact size I wanted. Noob problem! >< I put the most recent one on my twitter header https://twitter.com/hbouteneff

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                            • HeatherBouteneff
                              HeatherBouteneff @Jeannelle last edited by

                              @Jeannelle I took your advice and it does look a lot better I think, thank you!

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                                fwolfs @HeatherBouteneff last edited by

                                @HeatherBouteneff I like how it flows image flows from the winged animal to the witch! The one thing that I think would make it a bit clearer would be to have the abstraction of the horizon start before the horse or a bit after. It is a bit confusing with one side bing detailed and the other side being abstracted.

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                                  Richard Matthews last edited by

                                  @HeatherBouteneff this looks great! It's awesome to see the changes and the progress as well. One thing I have noticed is that the lines in the foreground and the background look very similar, I think if you made the foreground lines just a bit sharper it would add to the depth of the image. Great work!

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