Feedback on Tiger Piece please
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I like the idea of the cub dreaming of being a performer. My suggestion would be to make the thought bubble and image a little bigger as it is the main focus of the story. It’s a little lost on the background. Also how about make the book a little larger and create a cover that relates to the thought scene? So you can link the story the father is reading to the scene the girl is imagining?
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Ok, I have made some changes. I have added titles to the books, but not sure if you can even see them. Let me know what you think.
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I feel like the eyes of the tiger in the bed seem odd looking away, outside of the border, perhaps try either the eyes closed , like falling asleep and dreaming of this image or looking up in thought.
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I think this is awesome for your first scene with a character. Keep up the great work!
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@larue I agree, that was my first thought. If the cub is looking away, what is she looking at? I think eyes closed or looking at dad or maybe a toy in her hands would make sense. The colors are cheery and welcoming. I also like the overall concept.
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@jenn, @Larue, @KathrynAdebayo, @lizardillo, @micmac, @Kim-Hunter here is another corrected image with the eyes closed. I was also told that maybe having the thing behind the bed and the rug below dad’s feet should be a lighter color. Opinions on the change of color?
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I like your color changes, better contrast and harmony. I would also like to see either a slightly dark shade of pink on the interior of your canopy drape above her bed , or a lighter shade that represents the outer "front curtain part "of the canopy to show a bit of depth. I like the eyes closed by the way. I realize the toy Ferris wheel is what she was looking at but I like it now as just a "support" item in the story telling.
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Thank you all so much for your support in giving me feedback. Now I am going to work on rendering this idea, which is scary for me as I am new to procreate. Part of me wonders if I should do this with my watercolors or gouache because that is what I am used to. Maybe I will try both and see what I like better. I will never get better with procreate if I don’t try using it more.
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This is looking lovely. I’m not good with colour so not sure about the curtain and rug but agree with Larue that the inner part of the curtain could be a little darker to show depth, like looking at the inside a tent. As people have mentioned they were not sure what she was looking at then is it possible to move the toys into the frame rather than having them cropped off as they are part of the scene? A unicycle leaning again the bottom of the bed with the ‘how to ride a unicycle’ book next to it would add to the story. if you feel you can’t see the text on the books then perhaps make the text white so there is more contrast.
It’s looking fantastic for your first character based illustration. Your perspective is great. I would just align the headboard to match the perspective angle of the footboard at the bottom of the bed, you can see the headboard is a little off. But pretty much spot-on otherwise.
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@lizardillo thank you for the feedback. I will fix up the headboard. None of the shadows have been made on the picture yet. I am also thinking of printing out what I’ve drawn, tracing it, and painting it with watercolor, which is what I am most comfortable with. I think I will do both digital and watercolor and have a vote over which is better.
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@reelynn sounds great. Look forward to seeing it
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I am realizing that all the details I added will be very very small to paint. The paper I am using is 8 inches wide so things are minuscule. I don’t have a bigger paper to use right now, so I will try it at that size. If not, maybe I will get a bigger sheet.
