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    I did a graphic novel sample chapter! I'd love to know what you think :D

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    • ruth
      ruth last edited by

      Wow! Brilliant @braydin-hawlette! I was too engrossed in the story to notice any errors. I love all your characters, the story and your world-building, and Milton is so, so very annoying! πŸ™‚

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      • lizardillo
        lizardillo last edited by

        This is truly awesome! I can’t add any feedback to what has been said already especially regarding the sign language element (which I think is a great thing to try). Even with the minor errors, it’s still a technical masterpiece.

        I’m sure I’m not the only one but this has really inspired me to try a comic again. I don’t have a story but as I would love to try my CBPro course as a comic somehow as I know I’m not a traditional children’s picture book artist. Thanks for sharing this and all of the processes. And thanks for sharing your Clip Studio session you did. I have watched it quite a few times.

        Website: lizardillo.co.uk
        IG: instagram.com/lizardillo

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        • danielerossi
          danielerossi last edited by

          Wow that is awesome work! Love the colour palette and the integration of sign language. The action and story build up and ominous silhouettes.

          https://www.instagram.com/heyfrankybanky

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          • Kim Hunter
            Kim Hunter @danielerossi last edited by

            @danielerossi I really like this and want to see where the story is going. The story telling is clear and moves at a good pace without any excess wordiness that would need to be trimmed. That applies to the illustrations too. I like the great shortcut you took by showing the map with boring routes and shortcuts. This would have dragged out if explained as exposition. Nicely done.

            i love that the scary giant dog is a poodle. Perfect!

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              braden H @Melissa_Bailey last edited by

              @melissa_bailey said in I did a graphic novel sample chapter! I'd love to know what you think πŸ˜ƒ:

              Wow, it sounds like there is A LOT of backstory and worldbuilding

              Well, there is now πŸ˜ƒ thanks to questions from people πŸ˜‰ Part of my writing process is making stuff up to slap on plot holes that others point out.

              @melissa_bailey said in I did a graphic novel sample chapter! I'd love to know what you think πŸ˜ƒ:

              Is there a way to include some of those salient character points in the excerpt? In my opinion, it would be helpful to know that Tienna can hear but doesn't speak.

              I will see what I can do! In this very short chapter (which is all about Milton and Martin) it's tough to do organically, though. We shall see!

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              • braden H
                braden H @lizardillo last edited by

                @lizardillo said in I did a graphic novel sample chapter! I'd love to know what you think πŸ˜ƒ:

                And thanks for sharing your Clip Studio session you did. I have watched it quite a few times.

                I'm glad it's been useful! I've made many more workflow discoveries since then, so if you ever have any questions or anything lemme know πŸ˜ƒ

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                  braden H @Kim Hunter last edited by

                  @kim-hunter said in I did a graphic novel sample chapter! I'd love to know what you think πŸ˜ƒ:

                  i love that the scary giant dog is a poodle. Perfect!

                  It's based on our old family dog. We're not actually sure what it was! It's mom was a cocker spaniel and then there were various breeds of potential fathers hanging around the farm, so we always said he was a cocker scandal πŸ˜†

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                  • Lisa Clark
                    Lisa Clark last edited by

                    I read through this with two of my boys (11 and 9) and they absolutely loved it. Laughter and suspense all the way through. Thank you for giving us a few minutes to enjoy a wonderful story together!

                    www.instagram.com/lisaclarkart
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                      braden H @Lisa Clark last edited by

                      @lisa-clark Hooray for test readers! Glad they liked it πŸ™‚

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                        Haywong last edited by

                        Looks amazing. I love the characters' expressions, colour choices and muted backgrounds.

                        If you don't mind, can you share a bit about how you decided on the edges, shapes and gradations for the blue-purply backgrounds?

                        I really like how they are are kind of abstract and atmospheric at the same time- would love to know a bit more on your process for those.

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