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    • Griffin McPherson
      Griffin McPherson @Jeremiahbrown last edited by

      @jeremiahbrown this is looking pretty great to me, you’ve already got some great feedback from others on what can take this to the next level. Personally what stands out to me is Riley. Maybe this is just preference because I haven’t see anyone else mention this but Riley sort of looks like an animal to me and it’s been pretty distracting. His nose looks like the nose of a cat or a dog and I kept feeling my attention brought back to that.

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      • chrisaakins
        chrisaakins @Jeremiahbrown last edited by

        @jeremiahbrown very fun! I love rube goldberg machines!

        Chris Akins
        www.chrisakinsart.com
        www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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        • ruth
          ruth @Jeremiahbrown last edited by

          @jeremiahbrown That's it!! I think you've got it! Awesome!

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          • Jeremiahbrown
            Jeremiahbrown @Griffin McPherson last edited by

            @griffin Thank you, I see what you mean. For some reason I love to illustrate weird noses in most of my images and it can be a bit off-putting. Usually, I am mostly blind to it... who nose why? Is this version more appealing?
            Rileynonanimal.jpg

            Jeremiah Brown
            www.jeremiahbrownillustration.com
            https://www.instagram.com/jeremiah.brownillustration/

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            • Griffin McPherson
              Griffin McPherson @Jeremiahbrown last edited by

              @jeremiahbrown yeah, that totally fixes it!

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              • AngelinaKizz
                AngelinaKizz @Jeremiahbrown last edited by

                @jeremiahbrown I actually feel it ages Riley, I preferred the first nose. I think unless there’s something technically wrong with it, you should stay true to your style. Your style makes you unique, and some will love and some will not, and that’s ok.

                www.evarartistry.com
                www.Instagram.com/evarartistry/

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                • Jeremiahbrown
                  Jeremiahbrown @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                  @angelinakizz Aww, thanks! Good avice

                  Jeremiah Brown
                  www.jeremiahbrownillustration.com
                  https://www.instagram.com/jeremiah.brownillustration/

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                  • chrisaakins
                    chrisaakins last edited by

                    @Jeremiahbrown This is looking so good. I wonder if you should increase the contrast between the dog and the stuff around it. When I was looking at it today I immediately noticed the cat but it took me a minute to see the dog. I think the whole thing could benefit from a multiply layer of shadows to increase contrast and guide the eye.
                    I did a quick draw over to show what I mean.
                    1D99D561-5D12-482E-8946-0A7B6809C23A.jpeg

                    Chris Akins
                    www.chrisakinsart.com
                    www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                      Frogpunzel @chrisaakins last edited by

                      @chrisaakins That really does help guide the eye to the dog. @Jeremiahbrown This is great! However, I must admit that without reading the poster on the garage door I first thought it was a cat smacker, and that's why the dog was so happy...😅 Putting more shadow on the cat fixes that for me and I know the focus is on the dog, so the gadget is for the dog.

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                      • Jeremiahbrown
                        Jeremiahbrown @Frogpunzel last edited by

                        @chrisaakins I think that looks much better! Thanks
                        @frogpunzel Hahaha! The cat smacker is a fun idea 😋
                        I'll keep tinkering around with it ☺

                        Jeremiah Brown
                        www.jeremiahbrownillustration.com
                        https://www.instagram.com/jeremiah.brownillustration/

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