Riley... a mess
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@NessIllustration Thank you so much for taking the time to do that great draw over, it's a great guide to get me on the right track. I think the lighting you suggest unifies it more which is where my greatest struggle was.
@ThomCharles after reading your comment and looking at my image I just couldn't help but say out loud, "Holy cow, I can't believe I didn't see that!" I'm going to have to address that because I can't unsee it, haha.
@AngelinaKizz Definitely going to implement those "nitpicky" things, it's important! Thank you.
@Johanna-Kim On the plus side, your progression through the image is almost exactly what I wanted your eyes to do. On the downside I was hoping it was clear that Riley was making an attaboy pat machine that would simulate a person patting a dog in the way people do when they say, "gooood boy" or "attaboy." I'll work on making that clearer and great point about the electrical cords.
@DoodleMick Thanks!
@Asyas_illos Thank you for the grade of passing the "that's nice" score
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@jeremiahbrown This way more than nice! I am sure it will get the portfolio sticker. There is so much detail, so many funny details to find and the dog is just a fantastic character.
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@jeremiahbrown I think it was just me being slow to figure the concept out. But now that's you've confirmed my guess, it's crystal clear. Love this idea, and the dog's loving expression.
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@nessillustration Love the dog! Cool concept!
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This is great! So beautifully rendered. And I love the dog!! I think it's just a question of getting the focus right, at the moment everything is grabbing my attention because everything has the same level of detail and there's maybe not enough contrast? Darkening the background of the garage really helps. You could probably go quite dark in order to make Riley and the dog really stand out. Maybe even lightening the outside slightly? Anyway, I think it's great and I don't think you're far off. Definitely way past the "that's nice" level
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Thanks for all of the kind words, I was seriously thinking about abandoning it but love all your suggestions. I implemented most of them but still have a little bit of tweaking to do. Thank y'all so much!
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@jeremiahbrown I think you’ve nailed it! I love all of the changes you made.
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@jeremiahbrown this is looking pretty great to me, you’ve already got some great feedback from others on what can take this to the next level. Personally what stands out to me is Riley. Maybe this is just preference because I haven’t see anyone else mention this but Riley sort of looks like an animal to me and it’s been pretty distracting. His nose looks like the nose of a cat or a dog and I kept feeling my attention brought back to that.
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@jeremiahbrown very fun! I love rube goldberg machines!
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@jeremiahbrown That's it!! I think you've got it! Awesome!
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@griffin Thank you, I see what you mean. For some reason I love to illustrate weird noses in most of my images and it can be a bit off-putting. Usually, I am mostly blind to it... who nose why? Is this version more appealing?
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@jeremiahbrown yeah, that totally fixes it!
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@jeremiahbrown I actually feel it ages Riley, I preferred the first nose. I think unless there’s something technically wrong with it, you should stay true to your style. Your style makes you unique, and some will love and some will not, and that’s ok.
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@angelinakizz Aww, thanks! Good avice
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@Jeremiahbrown This is looking so good. I wonder if you should increase the contrast between the dog and the stuff around it. When I was looking at it today I immediately noticed the cat but it took me a minute to see the dog. I think the whole thing could benefit from a multiply layer of shadows to increase contrast and guide the eye.
I did a quick draw over to show what I mean.
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@chrisaakins That really does help guide the eye to the dog. @Jeremiahbrown This is great! However, I must admit that without reading the poster on the garage door I first thought it was a cat smacker, and that's why the dog was so happy...
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@chrisaakins I think that looks much better! Thanks
@frogpunzel Hahaha! The cat smacker is a fun idea
I'll keep tinkering around with it
