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    • Valerie Light
      Valerie Light @jenn last edited by

      @jenn I can see they're brainstorming ways to get across the river to the carnival.

      I hope it's ok to offer another take on this. I think I can see you doing something I often get stuck on, which is to build out the shapes and details in a composition, and then squeeze story details in between what I've already drawn. Then I end up with no clear focal point. I think if you wanted to take this piece to the next level, using these elements in a new composition and character poses that say "we are brainstorming to get across the river to the awesome thing" and then deciding if the kids are focused on the carnival, the brainstorm cloud, or each other, or tools, etc.

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      • jenn
        jenn @Valerie Light last edited by

        @Valerie-Light thank you so much. You have described my problem exactly. The problem is now which concept to make into the focus. It's a good problem to have, though. I am glad that the characters' goal has been made clear, but now I have to choose how to tell the story.

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        • jenn
          jenn last edited by jenn

          brainstorm-color4.jpg
          I'm SO BAD AT COLOR but here's a progress shot of the new composition, with more focus on the brainstorm itself. I am having trouble with colors and values. I want the storm to be colorful, but still read as a storm. Frustration... I'm gonna take a break and go shopping.

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          • Valerie Light
            Valerie Light @jenn last edited by

            @jenn I actually really like the way you use color. I remember your roughs for the Riley prompt. the box kite was luminous.
            In this one, you might just want to sub out that lime color with a darker value, and keep getting lighter as you go into the background, to lean into that atmospheric perspective drawing your eye back.

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            • jenn
              jenn @Valerie Light last edited by

              @Valerie-Light ❤ ❤ ❤ Thanks, I will try that.

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              • PenAndrew
                PenAndrew @jenn last edited by

                @jenn I think you could play with colour to be more comfortable with it, as well as make colour charts if that's appealing.
                I found by looking at colour I could see what I liked If a colour was too cold and dull I would try adding another to see how it brought it to life, I found single colours with pencils often were more boring compared to a mix of two, that always brought the colours to life. Sometimes three colours created amazing colour. But I had to mix the right three tones, usually a light, medium and dark colour.

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                • jenn
                  jenn last edited by

                  OK I'm still hacking away at this. Thanks for the feedback and encouragement on color @Valerie-Light and @PenAndrew.

                  brainstorm-color5.jpg

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                  • Asyas_illos
                    Asyas_illos @jenn last edited by

                    @jenn you can do it!

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                    • jenn
                      jenn @Asyas_illos last edited by

                      @Asyas_illos ❤ Thanks!

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                      • Kristen Lango
                        Kristen Lango @jenn last edited by

                        @jenn This feels clear! I can see that they need to cross the river to get to the fair and they are brainstorming solutions - I think this will work out as a finished piece 🙂

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                        • jenn
                          jenn @Kristen Lango last edited by

                          @Kristen-Lango thank you for that feedback. I was feeling unsure about the level of clarity.

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                          • jenn
                            jenn last edited by

                            The final (same as the contest thread). Thanks @Kristen-Lango, @Asyas_illos @PenAndrew @Valerie-Light @skeletortoise @kirsten-mcg for pushing me to strengthen it. ❤

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                            • Valerie Light
                              Valerie Light @jenn last edited by

                              @jenn Nice work and great progress! And again I love the way you're using color!

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                              • PenAndrew
                                PenAndrew @jenn last edited by

                                @jenn Much better Jenn.

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                                • AngelinaKizz
                                  AngelinaKizz last edited by

                                  Nice job Jenn!

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                                  • PenAndrew
                                    PenAndrew @jenn last edited by

                                    @jenn I am glad if I helped in any small way.

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                                    • skeletortoise
                                      skeletortoise @jenn last edited by

                                      @jenn great job!

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