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    • patricialamas
      patricialamas last edited by

      Thanks @Melissa_Bailey and @Robert-Henderson! It’s the scene in The Secret Garden when Mary is upset that she can’t go outside and Martha comes in and says, “I mean, can’t you read, knit or sew…?”

      I don’t feel the need to communicate all that as if it’s a single-cell comic, but I am thinking about other possible visual clues as to why Mary might be upset. My first thought was some gardening tools and seeds next to her, except she hasn’t yet received those in the story!

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      • Melissa_Bailey
        Melissa_Bailey @patricialamas last edited by

        @patricialamas you've definitely captured that Mary wants to be outside. That might be enough. Adding more stuff might just be ... more. That might not add anything to the illustration.

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        • patricialamas
          patricialamas last edited by

          Getting close! I’m still struggling a little finding my technique in procreate, and the result is that things tend to feel stiffer than I want. Any feedback is welcome!

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          • jenn
            jenn @patricialamas last edited by

            @patricialamas beautiful moody palette and texture. The style is so classic. You capture so much about the scene with the details you included, such as the vines, clothing, expressions, and stone wall. Just out of curiosity, I wonder what it might be like with Martha looking up at the robin, maybe on a branch?

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            • PenAndrew
              PenAndrew @patricialamas last edited by PenAndrew

              @patricialamas I never congratulated you on wining the contest last month. I also wanted to say I am glad you stayed with adding the characters as that really made the difference. Your instincts to use them were right.
              So, Congratulations!

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              • patricialamas
                patricialamas last edited by

                @jenn That’s a good idea! An overlapping tree branch would also give a little more depth and help break up the squareness of the window…

                @PenAndrew Thanks! I was nervous about breaking the rules of the prompt, but having that one character made it feel less like a ghost town and seemed like a good compromise. Maybe the rest of the animal patrons will return for the final portfolio piece.

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                • PenAndrew
                  PenAndrew @patricialamas last edited by

                  @patricialamas Yes, I was thinking that too! I think that your initial instincts to include the other characters was a better idea! But I feel you got a bit swayed. I think one of your successful factors was the way you captured the dappled light through the tree.

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                  • ArtMelC
                    ArtMelC @patricialamas last edited by

                    @patricialamas I love this sooo much! Just wondering if the robin could do something more to the overall story?

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                    • Johanna Kim
                      Johanna Kim SVS OG @patricialamas last edited by

                      @patricialamas This is absolutely gorgeous! It feels traditional to me. Love the palette and rendering of your figures.

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                      • Griffin McPherson
                        Griffin McPherson @patricialamas last edited by

                        @patricialamas My one concern is that looking out a window on a rainy day is a bit of a cliche and from the critique arena perspective I think that’s something the judges will consider. However I still really love this illustration, the style is gorgeous!

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                          Robert Henderson @patricialamas last edited by

                          @patricialamas

                          This is looking really good. Now is the tough part, letting go for a bit and then come back to it. It is always difficult not to over work this beautiful piece. At some point you will habe to give yourself permission to be finished and start the next project. Well done!

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                          • patricialamas
                            patricialamas last edited by

                            Made some changes to add depth and take some focus away from the robin, who I think was calling too much attention to himself. I like having him in there to give a little context and hint at what’s to come later in the story, but he’s not an active part of this scene. Thoughts on this version?

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                            • AngelinaKizz
                              AngelinaKizz @patricialamas last edited by

                              @patricialamas I feel more drawn to the first version, though it does feel like somethings missing seeing the second. I feel too drawn to the trees though as they are quite prominent now. Could you have just a few thinner branches crossing into the scene, rather than the heaviness of the main branch? I really love your work and color palettes!!!

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                              • patricialamas
                                patricialamas @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                                @AngelinaKizz Thanks! Thinning the tree out really does seem to help, along with increasing the contrast inside the window so the figures are a clearer focus.

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                                • AngelinaKizz
                                  AngelinaKizz @patricialamas last edited by

                                  @patricialamas oooh yes! That’s a huge improvement! It’s fabulous.

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                                  • Kristen Lango
                                    Kristen Lango @patricialamas last edited by

                                    @patricialamas Really lovely work! I think adding in those trees helped it a lot to frame the moment and the child's emotion of being upset about a rainy day is very clear and reads super well.
                                    One thing that I'm maybe a tiny bit confused about is the cheerful look of the woman behind her... is she trying to cheer the child up by offering tea? Possibly this is just my own misunderstanding. Overall, a wonderful piece 🙂

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                                    • patricialamas
                                      patricialamas @Kristen Lango last edited by

                                      @Kristen-Lango I wanted to illustrate the scene in The Secret Garden in which Mary is upset that it’s raining and Martha the maid comes in to serve breakfast and is surprised that Mary doesn’t know how to have fun indoors. So your interpretation is fairly close!

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                                      • Kim Rosenlof
                                        Kim Rosenlof @patricialamas last edited by

                                        @patricialamas This is lovely. I like the color palette and the characters are so nice. I especially love the style and the changes you made. To me the tray that has the cup on it looks like it could also be part of the window frame because they are similar colors. Maybe you could make it slightly darker or lighter than the window frame or adjust the color a little bit?

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                                        • Kristen Lango
                                          Kristen Lango @patricialamas last edited by

                                          @patricialamas Ah nice, then I think it's perfect!

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                                          • patricialamas
                                            patricialamas @Kim Rosenlof last edited by

                                            @Kim-Rosenlof Good suggestion! I made it brown and lowered it a bit. Thanks!

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