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  • AngelinaKizz
    AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by 11 Jul 2022, 04:47

    @Asyas_illos I noticed one small thing, that when it's thumbnail sized, the bunny riding the carrot isn't as clear as I think he should be. His shirt dissipates into background, and the pink and orange seem to be of similar value (without doing a black and white flip).

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    • Asyas_illos
      Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by 11 Jul 2022, 04:59

      @AngelinaKizz thanks! Yes since I have the light shining on them from the star it washes out the bunnies darker tone and I’ll look into darker colored pajamas options 😊

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      • Asyas_illos
        Asyas_illos last edited by 11 Jul 2022, 05:27

        I think this helps a little.? I don’t want to bring them much darker cuz it will then become similar in value to her fur… maybe she should have no pajamas? Would it still appear she is dreaming?
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        AngelinaKizz Kristen Lango 2 Replies Last reply 15 Jul 2022, 14:53 Reply Quote 2
        • AngelinaKizz
          AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by 11 Jul 2022, 05:37

          @Asyas_illos I really like the changes you've made!

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          • Asyas_illos
            Asyas_illos last edited by 15 Jul 2022, 00:45

            Yep started another lol I’m from Northern California and live in the redwoods where we have a drive through tree, so this was inspired by that. Although these days you can probably only fit a vw bug or fiat through it. So my concept is one young bunny is too mesmerized by the giant trees he is being passed by the other runners. Thoughts?
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            • Asyas_illos
              Asyas_illos last edited by 15 Jul 2022, 04:38

              Update fitting characters into comp!

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              • AngelinaKizz
                AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by 15 Jul 2022, 05:02

                @Asyas_illos absolutely gorgeous background design

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                • Asyas_illos
                  Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by 15 Jul 2022, 13:49

                  @AngelinaKizz thank you I was a little worried it was a bit too saturated.

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                  • Asyas_illos
                    Asyas_illos last edited by 15 Jul 2022, 14:23

                    I did a light blue overlay layer over the whole thing just to see if it would cool it off a bit.
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                    • Kristen Lango
                      Kristen Lango @Asyas_illos last edited by 15 Jul 2022, 14:44

                      @Asyas_illos The ghost bunnies are a great addition! I like that a lot and great job with your color palette too!

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                      • Kristen Lango
                        Kristen Lango @Asyas_illos last edited by 15 Jul 2022, 14:53

                        @Asyas_illos I love this whimsical piece! I can totally feel that this is her dream and I think you've done a really nice job of making her color that pinkish coral - it really draws your eye there.

                        I'm thinking, one thing that might make it even stronger would be to make the fish a less warm color - the yellow is nice and lovely but its so bright I just wonder if they were perhaps a sea-foam green or a light purple if the story would be even clearer?

                        I'm only bringing this up because the fish are so beautifully done and I feel my eye wanting to look at them more than the main character.

                        But absolutely great work on this one!!

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                        • Asyas_illos
                          Asyas_illos @Kristen Lango last edited by 15 Jul 2022, 19:44

                          @Kristen-Lango thank you for the feedback! I’ve already submitted but maybe I’ll play around with those colors and see what happens. Thanks!

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                          • Asyas_illos
                            Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos 15 Jul 2022, 20:17 15 Jul 2022, 20:17

                            Whoops sideways… this one is obviously not a drive through but a walkthrough it’s been cut into an old stump, so it’s not a living tree anymore.
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                            • Larue
                              Larue last edited by 15 Jul 2022, 20:58

                              Coming in late but loving them all. The bright colors, textures and imagination are all great! Seems like you are overflowing with ideas, lucky you!

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                              • Asyas_illos
                                Asyas_illos last edited by 16 Jul 2022, 01:51

                                Still working on characters lol
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                                • Asyas_illos
                                  Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos 16 Jul 2022, 17:21 16 Jul 2022, 04:32

                                  Not sure what else I can do here needs something else though I think…
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                                    Frogpunzel @Asyas_illos last edited by 17 Jul 2022, 05:13

                                    @Asyas_illos This is great, I love the colors! The only issue I feel there might be is that my eye is drawn to the awesome lighting around the tree and less on the characters.

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                                    • ?
                                      A Former User @Asyas_illos last edited by 17 Jul 2022, 07:47

                                      @Asyas_illos This piece has a really beautiful atmosphere! In fact I think it's my favourite of the three 😛 The lighting really conveys a sense of grandeur and awe.

                                      I agree with @Frogpunzel though, that the story around the characters is a little lost. I know your initial concept was to have one of the rabbits be so in all awe of the large tree that it forgot about the race, but it doesn't come through very strongly at this point. The expression on the blue rabbit looks a little more "dumbfounded" and "tired" (because of the slouch) than "awestruck" to me (maybe change his mouth to a smile and add "shiny eyes"?), and my eye is actually more naturally drawn to the grey-green rabbit as he is brilliantly contrasted against the white light behind to tree.

                                      Perhaps you could try changing the awestruck character to the grey-green rabbit, like he's just coming in under the tree and is looking up into the arch? He could be so awestruck that he's forgotten about the carrot he's holding and he's holding it kinda limply in one hand.

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                                      • Asyas_illos
                                        Asyas_illos @Guest last edited by 17 Jul 2022, 15:26

                                        @JQ thanks for the feedback I’ll see what I can do! I know it didn’t go quite as planned lol!

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                                        • Asyas_illos
                                          Asyas_illos last edited by 19 Jul 2022, 06:35

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