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    • jenn
      jenn last edited by

      Hi fellow Rabbits,
      I know this is SO last minute. If you have 48 seconds to throw an opinion my way, I would be grateful. Is there anything super annoying about this composition? Does it make only 55% sense? Can you even tell what is going on? Feel free to point it out. Thank you very much in advance.

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      • KevinTreaccar
        KevinTreaccar @jenn last edited by

        @jenn This reminds me of Cool Runnings and it looks to me like the fourth/back bunny is falling off or struggling to jump onto the bobsled.

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        • jenn
          jenn @KevinTreaccar last edited by

          @KevinTreaccar yay, you got it, thanks!

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          • Asyas_illos
            Asyas_illos @jenn last edited by

            @jenn feel the rhythm, feel the rhyme, look out Jamaica it’s bobsled time! This is looking great!

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            • lucy_gow
              lucy_gow @jenn last edited by

              @jenn I think it's lovely! I like all the curves. Perhaps the horizontal line in front of the mountains bothers me a little though – it could be less straight - maybe like a flattish U-shape? That's just my sense though, it's not well-founded in any experience of bobsledding down mountains.

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              • jenn
                jenn @Asyas_illos last edited by

                @Asyas_illos thanks πŸ™‚

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                • jenn
                  jenn @lucy_gow last edited by jenn

                  @lucy_gow thank you so much πŸ™‚

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                  • PenAndrew
                    PenAndrew @jenn last edited by

                    @jenn A good composition, I would make the central figures and car larger to add impact.

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                    • jenn
                      jenn @PenAndrew last edited by

                      @PenAndrew ok thanks very much πŸ™‚

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                      • kirsten-mcg
                        kirsten-mcg last edited by

                        This is so much fun! He's falling/being blow off the end of the bobsled, right? I think your composition is working well. I like how the mountains and stream in the background are mimicking the curve of the track. I also think it has a good sense of movement to it. Keep going!

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                        • jenn
                          jenn last edited by

                          Thank you for helping me with the composition, friends. I didn't quite finish but I'm just going to submit it anyway for my own sense of closure. I can already see so many things wrong with it. I will revisit later. ❀ jenn-desautels-jul2022a.jpg

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                          • Asyas_illos
                            Asyas_illos @jenn last edited by

                            @jenn I really like it, great colors!

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