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    • KevinTreaccar
      KevinTreaccar @jenn last edited by

      @jenn This reminds me of Cool Runnings and it looks to me like the fourth/back bunny is falling off or struggling to jump onto the bobsled.

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      • jenn
        jenn @KevinTreaccar last edited by

        @KevinTreaccar yay, you got it, thanks!

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        • Asyas_illos
          Asyas_illos @jenn last edited by

          @jenn feel the rhythm, feel the rhyme, look out Jamaica it’s bobsled time! This is looking great!

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          • lucy_gow
            lucy_gow @jenn last edited by

            @jenn I think it's lovely! I like all the curves. Perhaps the horizontal line in front of the mountains bothers me a little though – it could be less straight - maybe like a flattish U-shape? That's just my sense though, it's not well-founded in any experience of bobsledding down mountains.

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            • jenn
              jenn @Asyas_illos last edited by

              @Asyas_illos thanks πŸ™‚

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              • jenn
                jenn @lucy_gow last edited by jenn

                @lucy_gow thank you so much πŸ™‚

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                • PenAndrew
                  PenAndrew @jenn last edited by

                  @jenn A good composition, I would make the central figures and car larger to add impact.

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                  • jenn
                    jenn @PenAndrew last edited by

                    @PenAndrew ok thanks very much πŸ™‚

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                    • kirsten-mcg
                      kirsten-mcg last edited by

                      This is so much fun! He's falling/being blow off the end of the bobsled, right? I think your composition is working well. I like how the mountains and stream in the background are mimicking the curve of the track. I also think it has a good sense of movement to it. Keep going!

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                      • jenn
                        jenn last edited by

                        Thank you for helping me with the composition, friends. I didn't quite finish but I'm just going to submit it anyway for my own sense of closure. I can already see so many things wrong with it. I will revisit later. ❀ jenn-desautels-jul2022a.jpg

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                        • Asyas_illos
                          Asyas_illos @jenn last edited by

                          @jenn I really like it, great colors!

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