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    • jenn
      jenn @KevinTreaccar last edited by

      @KevinTreaccar yay, you got it, thanks!

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        Asyas_illos @jenn last edited by

        @jenn feel the rhythm, feel the rhyme, look out Jamaica it’s bobsled time! This is looking great!

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        • lucy_gow
          lucy_gow @jenn last edited by

          @jenn I think it's lovely! I like all the curves. Perhaps the horizontal line in front of the mountains bothers me a little though – it could be less straight - maybe like a flattish U-shape? That's just my sense though, it's not well-founded in any experience of bobsledding down mountains.

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          • jenn
            jenn @Asyas_illos last edited by

            @Asyas_illos thanks πŸ™‚

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            • jenn
              jenn @lucy_gow last edited by jenn

              @lucy_gow thank you so much πŸ™‚

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              • PenAndrew
                PenAndrew @jenn last edited by

                @jenn A good composition, I would make the central figures and car larger to add impact.

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                • jenn
                  jenn @PenAndrew last edited by

                  @PenAndrew ok thanks very much πŸ™‚

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                  • kirsten-mcg
                    kirsten-mcg last edited by

                    This is so much fun! He's falling/being blow off the end of the bobsled, right? I think your composition is working well. I like how the mountains and stream in the background are mimicking the curve of the track. I also think it has a good sense of movement to it. Keep going!

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                    • jenn
                      jenn last edited by

                      Thank you for helping me with the composition, friends. I didn't quite finish but I'm just going to submit it anyway for my own sense of closure. I can already see so many things wrong with it. I will revisit later. ❀ jenn-desautels-jul2022a.jpg

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                      • Asyas_illos
                        Asyas_illos @jenn last edited by

                        @jenn I really like it, great colors!

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