Kamari Wip - which one?

[Pamela Fraley]

@Chantal-Goetheer Its hard to put a finger on what makes something look “amateurish.” It’s a combination of things working together that make them look professional and when your learning all the things at the same time, sometimes, certain components work better than others. Composition, lighting, line work, value structure, color balance… On one of the Podcasts they talked about it like a golf swing. Theres a hundred things you need to pull off to get a perfect swing, but you can’t focus on learning all of that at once, so one day you focus on how to put your hands on the club and a different day you focus on your feet, etc…
Sometimes I get discouraged and feel like I’m never going to get there. But, it just takes a lot of mileage with your pencil and a lot of studying. Also, a lot of patience with yourself.
For this piece, I think pushing the value to your focal point would be helpful. I also like the draw over Asya did. I think fading that line of the rock and making the waterline go over it would fix a lot. Its a tricky perspective piece to pull off. As for the underwater feeling… Its a little harder working traditionally, but you maybe could do a light wash or something over top of the whole underwater portion. Look at some reference photos - like finding Nemo or something - to see how they did it. Sometimes its that the picture fades and gets darker around the edges, or particles or sunlight in the water… I would make the mermaid in the foreground have more floaty hair too. It doesn’t need to stand straight up, but it wouldn’t be laying flat under the water either. I hope thats helpful!

[Pamela Fraley]

@Chantal-Goetheer p.s. I’m loving the way your waves at the top of the water are looking! It looks like you had fun doing that.
p.p.s I’m not sure exactly what you should work on. But, I have found a lot of help in doing master studies, in between my own projects. Lee has a method on how to do them, but I cant remember where that is. Do you remember @Asyas_illos ?

[kirsten-mcg]

@Chantal-Goetheer this is a tough one! I did a couple draw overs and really struggles with understanding the perspective. I went and looked up a couple of references and I think I understand better what’s happening. I think in order to pull off a cutaway image like this it would have to be much taller. I did a quick thumbnail so you can see what I mean. That option would require a complete re-draw though. something like this.

For the view you have, I don’t think a cutaway image works. I think you would need to change it so that you’re looking up at the crumbling cliff through the water…which would mean you couldn’t use your cool wave design (which I love!). Something like this.
These are the references I used to see this.

Working traditionally you can do a light blue or blue green watercolor wash over the underwater portion to give it the apprearance of being underwater. Underwater light is very blue.

[kirsten-mcg]

@Chantal-Goetheer I agree with @Pamela-Fraley that it is hard to pinpoint exactly what makes work feel armature. I think there’s a lot that goes into it. I don’t know if you’ve worked your way though the SVS foundations courses yet, but I think those will do the most for you as far as moving your work away from the amateur realm and into the pro realm. I know understanding how to design an image really helped my art progress. Really focusing on those classes and doing the assignments until you feel you have internalized what they are teaching should be very helpful. It’s also just mileage though. Just keep trying and practicing!

[Pamela Fraley]

@kirsten-mcg I like that one you did with the piece of the city falling into the water. I think it makes a really nice connection between the two places and makes it read a lot clearer.

[Chantal Goetheer]

@kirsten-mcg thanks so much! I am completely re drawing it again . Will see what comes out of it. Sometimes I think I should try digital. Skips all of the many versions, but then it's the same issue with millage as well and Id still need to re-draw stuff often. And don't enjoy sitting behind a computer. I'm working on the foundation courses still. There is always a lack of time. Next month I need to make more of a plan and make the prompt in a way that lets me work on the basic principles more and going for simpler instead of complicated .

[Chantal Goetheer]

@Asyas_illos thanks so much!! I'm currently re-drawing again using your draw over as inspiration. It sucks up so much time, but learned a lot from you guys. The draw overs really works so well. Did my own draw over with black marker on my own work to figure things out more. To be continued... cliffhanger

[Chantal Goetheer]

@Pamela-Fraley thanks for your help and kind words! I remember the golf episode. Luckily I can happily and with frustration spend hours drawing and thinking about it day after day, so I just keep going. Already Im so happy I broke through my being stuck phase to draw anything because it would not be as I had in mind instantly. It has kept me back a decade. With my chronic lack of time I just need to figure out how to study smarter. I was thinking of master studies and should really start with the simpeler ideas before moving on to these hugely complicated ideas . Thanks again!

[kirsten-mcg]

@Chantal-Goetheer Good for you for re-drawing again! I know how frustrating it is to get part way done and then have to start over. But the 2nd attempt usually comes out so much better. And it's my personal opinion that doing traditional art makes you better at digital. You really learn a lot when you take away the ability to endlessly re-do. Keep plugging away at the foundations. Slow and steady wins the race.

[Chantal Goetheer]

@kirsten-mcg @Asyas_illos @Mia-Clarke @Pamela-Fraley here goes again. I think this was my last attempt at redrawing it. Not quite happy with the village up on the rock and the face of the kid. But it looks more underwater this way I think. Colourwise it's not quite working all together.
I need to find less textured watercolour paper because the waves and hair don't come out quite as nice and I like the combination of watercolour and coloured pencils.
Do you have any final thoughts on this one?

[kirsten-mcg]

@Chantal-Goetheer good job on your rework! It does look more underwater. My favorite paper for watercolor and colored pencil is Arches hot press watercolor paper. It’s much smoother.

[Chantal Goetheer]

@kirsten-mcg thanks! Have to orde some different watercolor paper online. In the shop near me there is only very textured ones.
I'm going to squeeze in a second idea this month. @Asyas_illos @kirsten-mcg @Mia-Clarke @Pamela-Fraley any thoughts on this composition? Was happy with the loose elements so just cut them out and played around with them. This is what I liked most. Will see where tomorrow evening takes this further.

[Asyas_illos]

@Chantal-Goetheer this looks like a nice composition though I’m unsure what the object is in the bottom left corner, I’m going to guess plane? I thought maybe it was some kind of bird at first. Also I really like how your are using cut pieces to move them around until finding the right places on the page, for someone not using digital this is very smart!

[Chantal Goetheer]

@Asyas_illos thanks . It's meant to be a very fast looking bird.

[Asyas_illos]

@Chantal-Goetheer ok so my initial hunch was correct, my you can make a bit smaller to help distinguish? Or show that’s farther below them?

[Asyas_illos]

@Chantal-Goetheer there’s a thing (maybe it’s a rule?) I don’t know, but to create an engaging or interesting image, you want to vary the sizes of the objects in your illustrations. Big small and huge. Right now things are pretty similar in size, I’d recommend mixing it up a bit.

[Chantal Goetheer]

@Asyas_illos true! Hadn't taken it into account yet. Thanks!!

[Chantal Goetheer]

@Asyas_illos @kirsten-mcg @Mia-Clarke @Pamela-Fraley I'm struggling to find the right composition and combination of sizes. The bear and bird can still change size and position. I made various and want to glue them to the final part. The rest is pretty much stuck. Won't have much time left coming days.
Which combo/comp works best?

[Chantal Goetheer]

@Asyas_illos @kirsten-mcg @Mia-Clarke @Pamela-Fraley I decided to go for the first option of all options in the above message because the bear has more space to fall and there is most variance it seems in sizes of shapes. Tonight I will finish it with some colored pencils and scan it. Tomorrow there time is up for me. Thanks for all your help on my pieces!

[kirsten-mcg]

@Chantal-Goetheer Sorry I missed your posts until now! I got busy. Looking good though. Good job managing to get 2 pieces done! I was trying to do 2 as well, but ran out of time.