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Critiques Please! • Nativity Triptych • WIP

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  • kirsten-mcg
    kirsten-mcg @Miriam last edited by 28 Nov 2022, 15:46

    @Miriam I love the look of the uneven arch over the Nativity.

    I think the shepherds should be silhouettes like all the other figures. They look like they would read just fine without the lighter color for their head covering. If I squint my eyes it all blends together, and I still see a shepherd.

    I agree with @Chantal-Goetheer that making a little light from the star over the nativity bleed over into the wiseman image would work well. That way you can still suggest that they're following a star, but not need to repeat it.

    Good luck! And show us the finished pieces!

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      Frogpunzel @Miriam last edited by 28 Nov 2022, 21:35

      @Miriam I would have to agree with what has been said. I think spilling a little of the stars light onto the wise men's side is a great idea. For me I didn't realize the arch was to represent the stable/cave, but I thought it was more of a designed border. I do think it looks fine, I just didn't quite get the whole idea. This is a really neat project, I have wanted to attempt a nativity scene for some time but not quite sure how I would want to do it.

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      • Miriam
        Miriam last edited by 29 Nov 2022, 08:38

        @Chantal-Goetheer @kirsten-mcg & @Frogpunzel

        Thanks for the advice!

        Adding the bit of wall on the manger scene really helps. I also lowered the arch a little.

        I tried adding a glow like it’s coming from the star, but it didn’t look right because there’s a gap of sky in between. I’d have to move the star over for it to work, but I like having the star right above the manger.

        So I tried adding a moon for the wisemen, plus a little glow on the town & I like it.

        You guys were right, it is better for the shepherds to be fully silhouette to match the other frames. I also added glow on the town to match the wisemen image.

        Now I just need to lighten up the layers with a textured mask & try to keep the same glow effects.

        @Frogpunzel It would be great to see your version of a Nativity.

        Wisemen samples.jpg

        revised.jpg

        kirsten-mcg Chantal Goetheer ArtistErin 3 Replies Last reply 29 Nov 2022, 17:31 Reply Quote 2
        • kirsten-mcg
          kirsten-mcg @Miriam last edited by 29 Nov 2022, 15:33

          @Miriam This turned out beautiful! I like that all three images have something glowing in the sky. And the shepherds look great as silhouettes. 😁

          Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/kirsten.mcgonigal.art/
          Portfolio Site: www.kirstenmcgonigalart.com

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          • Chantal Goetheer
            Chantal Goetheer @Miriam last edited by 29 Nov 2022, 16:33

            @Miriam it will be awesome Saturday!!

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            • ArtistErin
              ArtistErin @Miriam last edited by 29 Nov 2022, 17:31

              @Miriam Very nice 🙂 Meant to chime in earlier... love seeing how things unfolded for you 🙂

              Erin Richardson
              instagram.com/erinrichardsondesigns21
              www.erinrichardsondesigns.com

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              • Miriam
                Miriam last edited by Miriam 30 Nov 2022, 09:08 30 Nov 2022, 09:06

                @kirsten-mcg @Chantal-Goetheer @ArtistErin @ArtMelC @Sarah-VanDam @Frogpunzel

                So, it turns out that it looked VERY different printed out & was much too dark overall, and the glow pretty much erased the star / angel.

                Fortunately, I had everything on separate layers, & was able to recolor each one & adjust a few things.

                NATIVITY.jpg

                Miriam F kirsten-mcg 3 Replies Last reply 30 Nov 2022, 16:54 Reply Quote 5
                • Miriam
                  Miriam @Miriam last edited by 30 Nov 2022, 09:46

                  I♥ layers.
                  Ha, ha I should make a shirt.

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                    Frogpunzel @Miriam last edited by 30 Nov 2022, 15:08

                    @Miriam Love it!

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                    • kirsten-mcg
                      kirsten-mcg @Miriam last edited by 30 Nov 2022, 16:54

                      @Miriam The joys of printing. 🥴

                      Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/kirsten.mcgonigal.art/
                      Portfolio Site: www.kirstenmcgonigalart.com

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                      • Miriam
                        Miriam last edited by Miriam 27 Dec 2022, 18:09 26 Dec 2022, 22:57

                        Thanks for all the help & support on this project. Here's how it turned out:

                        Nativity Centerpieces.jpg

                        (We put one on each table, but I combined the photos to show the different sides.)

                        ArtMelC Chantal Goetheer kirsten-mcg 3 Replies Last reply 27 Dec 2022, 19:36 Reply Quote 2
                        • ArtMelC
                          ArtMelC @Miriam last edited by 27 Dec 2022, 13:17

                          @Miriam beautiful! Merry Christmas to you ❤️

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                          • Chantal Goetheer
                            Chantal Goetheer @Miriam last edited by 27 Dec 2022, 14:57

                            @Miriam wow it looks really pretty!!! And a belastend Merry Christmas! Thanks for sharing, was wondering the other day how it had turned out.

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                            • kirsten-mcg
                              kirsten-mcg @Miriam last edited by 27 Dec 2022, 19:36

                              @Miriam These turned out gorgeous! Seeing them makes me want to try doing some for next year. Thank you for sharing the final result!

                              Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/kirsten.mcgonigal.art/
                              Portfolio Site: www.kirstenmcgonigalart.com

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                              • ArtistErin
                                ArtistErin last edited by 29 Dec 2022, 16:05

                                Love how these turned out!!! 🙂

                                Erin Richardson
                                instagram.com/erinrichardsondesigns21
                                www.erinrichardsondesigns.com

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