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    • ArtistErin
      ArtistErin @Pamela Fraley last edited by

      @Pamela-Fraley AWW thank you πŸ™‚

      Erin Richardson
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      • ArtistErin
        ArtistErin last edited by

        Kamari color...

        Feeling hesitant to submit! Hope I'm making progress here. Wondering if this looks alright and clear, good rendering?

        Thoughts welcome...

        kamari2Color.jpg

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        • Kim Rosenlof
          Kim Rosenlof @ArtistErin last edited by

          @ArtistErin This is looking good. I like your concept and the characters. I think that the ship is lost in this version. I think you need to make sure it is more visible since it tells us the "end" part of the prompt. Also, watch for the tangent of the right bird and the ocean horizon line. I also like that you are using a limited pallet.

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          • LittleRaven
            LittleRaven @ArtistErin last edited by

            @ArtistErin I really like your concept. As for my feedback, my attention is really drawn to the bird on the right. I think this is because it has the most colour contrast on its beak (the bright saturated orange against the blue background), maybe make the orange a little less saturated. And I think the other bird should also look at the lamp, now it's just looking at the birds feet and nothing is going there. Keep up the good work!

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            • ArtistErin
              ArtistErin last edited by ArtistErin

              Kamari update...

              Needed to make the shipwreck more clear and also show Kamari just discovered a hidden treasure chest. What do think about the crabs I added? Trying to avoid over rendering the sand but do you think it needs something?
              @Kim-Rosenlof thank you for your feedback! So much appreciation πŸ™‚ I see the eyes on the blue footed booby need to be more clear but otherwise I think I'll go ahead and submit this.

              kamari2 copy.jpg

              Erin Richardson
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              • Asyas_illos
                Asyas_illos @ArtistErin last edited by

                @ArtistErin this looks really good I’m glad you did away with β€œthe body” lol. I do think the crabs clutter it a bit though.

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                • ArtistErin
                  ArtistErin @Asyas_illos last edited by

                  @Asyas_illos πŸ˜‚ Awesome... thank you πŸ™‚

                  Erin Richardson
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                  • ArtMelC
                    ArtMelC @ArtistErin last edited by

                    @ArtistErin I think remove the text on the boat. I made me think Kamari is the boat name instead of the boy. Your story is much clearer without!

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                    • ArtistErin
                      ArtistErin @ArtMelC last edited by ArtistErin

                      @ArtMelC Thank you πŸ™‚

                      I guess the text does confuse, I learned about naming boats and ships- one does put their own name and location on their boat but in this way it feels like the boat is the character named Kamari and not the kid.

                      This prompt has turned me inside out! Thanks for your insight...

                      Erin Richardson
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                      • ArtistErin
                        ArtistErin @LittleRaven last edited by

                        @LittleRaven Thank you! LOL I tried changing the bird's position to give variation and didn't realize until you pointed it out how he looks in the wrong direction. Trying to not have to redraw him. So much for the lazy approach!

                        Erin Richardson
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