Flying Pigs WIP, Feedback appreciated!
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I agree with Jiří Kůs' advice. I'd like to see the character more as the focus as well.
While I like your color palette of gold, amber and teal, everything has a fairly high level of saturation and is fighting for dominance. You're starting to do it with some of the houses in the background, but I think things need to be pushed a little more. The girl in the house is getting lost because her skin is the same color and value as the house, and her hair not much different.
I also feel like the composition is being cut in half at a diagonal, with the upper-right side being empty, and all the objects in the bottom-left. Just a little shifting of elements can solve it.
You have a nice sense of color, and a fun whimsical style and concepts. I like the smooth, almost watercolor-like transition in the painting of the houses. Keep up the good work!
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@Maile-McCarthy What a wonderful idea! I like your bright and warm colors. Feels just like summer… ^^
I accord with Jiří Kůs' and Shannon's advice and I have some ideas, too.
At first glance I thought the house in front (on the bottom line) is a landing place/field or something like that. Shorten the house to 1/3 maybe increase the airiness. Because I'm not good with words I draw my notes – hope you don't mind.
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I love the composition and the brightness! Its really fun to watch! More focus on the character is a very good idea! Keep up the good work Maile!
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Hi everyone. Thank you for the feedback! Here's my update.
I added text to the image. Did that fix the feeling that the top was too empty, or do you still think it needs more?
@Jiří-Kůs @Shannon-Perkins (and everyone, really), Thanks for pointing out the contrast/focal point issues with the girl. I worked on this a bunch, and I think it's a lot better in the new version. I did keep everything really saturated. Not sure if that's working or not.
@Fabienne Thanks for the paint over. That helped a lot. I like the space you created moving the foreground element down. (I also really liked the girl sitting on top of the house-- I didn't keep it, but I did add some more kids to the other windows. I think I might render them out a little more).
@Leontine-Gaasenbeek Thanks for the feedback. It's super helpful to hear that multiple people are having the same issues.
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Looks great to me, Really fun.
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@Lee-Holland Thanks
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Well done, its so much fun to watch!
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Superb! There is so much to explore!
Only one point: Which house is in the front? Shouldn't be the kids-house darker, because it's closer to the viewer? -
@Fabienne Yes, I see that now. The front one definitely needs to be darker. I'll go update it. Thank you!
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Awesome work at creating action in this piece Maile! The incline of the houses really adds a great line of motion.
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Great , I was immediately looking at the character
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@Jiří-Kůs @Dan-Tavis Thanks so much!
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I like the update, much easier to see the character, and the atmospheric perspective you used on the farthest house really adds a sense of depth. Also, having the text in there fills in that empty space I mentioned earlier. Picture books need that open space for text, earlier I was looking at it from a stand-alone piece. Good work!
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This is really nice, I like it very much
