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    Flying Pigs WIP, Feedback appreciated!

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    • Fabienne
      Fabienne @Maile McCarthy last edited by

      @Maile-McCarthy What a wonderful idea! I like your bright and warm colors. Feels just like summer… ^^
      I accord with Jiří Kůs' and Shannon's advice and I have some ideas, too.
      At first glance I thought the house in front (on the bottom line) is a landing place/field or something like that. Shorten the house to 1/3 maybe increase the airiness. Because I'm not good with words I draw my notes – hope you don't mind.

      Bildschirmfoto 2015-08-04 um 09.39.35.jpg

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      • Leontine
        Leontine last edited by

        I love the composition and the brightness! Its really fun to watch! More focus on the character is a very good idea! Keep up the good work Maile!

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        • Maile McCarthy
          Maile McCarthy @Maile McCarthy last edited by

          Hi everyone. Thank you for the feedback! Here's my update.

          I added text to the image. Did that fix the feeling that the top was too empty, or do you still think it needs more?

          upload-d2e53675-251b-4be8-8a79-097a08a4a308

          @Jiří-Kůs @Shannon-Perkins (and everyone, really), Thanks for pointing out the contrast/focal point issues with the girl. I worked on this a bunch, and I think it's a lot better in the new version. I did keep everything really saturated. Not sure if that's working or not.

          @Fabienne Thanks for the paint over. That helped a lot. I like the space you created moving the foreground element down. (I also really liked the girl sitting on top of the house-- I didn't keep it, but I did add some more kids to the other windows. I think I might render them out a little more).

          @Leontine-Gaasenbeek Thanks for the feedback. It's super helpful to hear that multiple people are having the same issues.

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          • Lee Holland
            Lee Holland last edited by

            Looks great to me, Really fun.

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            • Maile McCarthy
              Maile McCarthy @Lee Holland last edited by

              @Lee-Holland Thanks 🙂

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              • Leontine
                Leontine last edited by

                Well done, its so much fun to watch!

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                • Fabienne
                  Fabienne last edited by

                  Superb! There is so much to explore!
                  Only one point: Which house is in the front? Shouldn't be the kids-house darker, because it's closer to the viewer?

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                  • Maile McCarthy
                    Maile McCarthy @Fabienne last edited by

                    @Fabienne Yes, I see that now. The front one definitely needs to be darker. I'll go update it. Thank you!

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                    • Dan Tavis
                      Dan Tavis last edited by

                      Awesome work at creating action in this piece Maile! The incline of the houses really adds a great line of motion.

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                      • Jiří Kůs
                        Jiří Kůs last edited by

                        Great , I was immediately looking at the character 🙂

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                        • Maile McCarthy
                          Maile McCarthy @Jiří Kůs last edited by

                          @Jiří-Kůs @Dan-Tavis Thanks so much!

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                            Shannon Perkins last edited by

                            I like the update, much easier to see the character, and the atmospheric perspective you used on the farthest house really adds a sense of depth. Also, having the text in there fills in that empty space I mentioned earlier. Picture books need that open space for text, earlier I was looking at it from a stand-alone piece. Good work!

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                            • Isaac Vargas Cardenas
                              Isaac Vargas Cardenas last edited by

                              This is really nice, I like it very much 🙂

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