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      Guilherme Cavalcante @Jose Ramos last edited by

      @Jose-Ramos Hey! I saw the painting version. It's look pretty good. But you could exaggerate more in the expression. Also you could place the sunset in the background and play with the light? Anyway. It's look's nice 🙂

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      • Chip Valecek
        Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Jose Ramos last edited by

        @Jose-Ramos I was like wow that tree house is so similar to mine, checked my reference photo and it looks like we are using the same reference LOL back to the drawing board for me.


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        • Doha
          Doha last edited by

          Hi Jose,
          I am loving this design. The composition looks nice and the new expression on his face served the story well.
          I agree on the illumination note, the source o light is not really clear.
          Good luck!

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          • Jose Ramos
            Jose Ramos @Chip Valecek last edited by

            @Chip-Valecek Lol!...I searched in google tree hose , and I found this one:
            0_1497886537642_tree-house-postmodern-humor.jpeg
            Is it the same reference that you used? 🙂

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              Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Jose Ramos last edited by

              @Jose-Ramos indeed it is. We have some great taste LOL I am actually changing mine anyway, i had a new idea come to me last night before falling asleep. By the way your's looks awesome, great job!


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                Jose Ramos @Doha last edited by

                @Doha Hi my friend, Yes I agree about the light, maybe now is better, I´ve made the changes that Guillerme told me.
                Sunset light and a bit more exagerate the bunny expression.
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                • Jose Ramos
                  Jose Ramos @Chip Valecek last edited by

                  @Chip-Valecek hahaha, it was the most cartoon style. 🙂
                  Thanks Chip!

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                  • evilrobot
                    evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

                    @Jose-Ramos looks good the only thing I see is that you are getting some tangents with the rabbit's ears and the tree house railings. Nice work.

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                      Jose Ramos @evilrobot last edited by

                      @evilrobot said in Tree house WIP:

                      ree house railings. Nice work.

                      Hey, Thanks a lot...how do you think I can fix it?

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                      • tombarrettillo
                        tombarrettillo last edited by

                        Not sure if anyone has mentioned this, but the treehouse is brighter than the rabbit, which draws me to the treehouse first. Perhaps tone down the light in the doorway and window, and some of the glow on the house, and have a ray of the sunset focused on the rabbit. Also, took me a second to realize the bar dividing the doorway was in fact one of the posts holding up the porch roof. I would move the door opening to be more centered under the roof peak so as to avoid that confusing split.

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                        • Jose Ramos
                          Jose Ramos @tombarrettillo last edited by Jose Ramos

                          @tombarrettillo Hi Tom, yes I agree with your comments.
                          The treehose is not so bright like before, some glow around the tree and house has been added.
                          And the sunshine is there too, maybe is it so soft?
                          I´ve improved the doorway ...what you think? 😉
                          0_1497906252977_treehouse2.jpg

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                          • tombarrettillo
                            tombarrettillo last edited by

                            Very nice! Light and colors are good. My only pic (and it is a very small one) would be the small bit of light coming thru at the corner of the gray tree.

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                              smithdraws @Jose Ramos last edited by

                              @Jose-Ramos What about taking down the tree house and background color saturations about 5 to 10 percent? It would give some atmospheric perspective and help focus attention on the character. Also what if the rabbit's expression was, "determined," rather than scared? Scared seems like he is running away from something. Isn't he actually determined to save his friend? Great job by the way!

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                              • Jose Ramos
                                Jose Ramos last edited by

                                Hey, thanks guys for your advices, they´re welcome. 😉
                                I´ve added a light coming thru at the corner of the gray tree, and desaturated the background 10%, I´ve created a layer of orange solid with opacity 20%, so the atmospheric felling is better.
                                The character expression now is determined, so I think is better than scared. 🙂

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                                  smithdraws @Jose Ramos last edited by

                                  @Jose-Ramos Awesome 👏

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                                  • evilrobot
                                    evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

                                    This is looking great. You solved the problem with that top ear but I still see the tangent with the bottom ear and the the bottom rail. I'd make that ear come out and drop lower than the bottom rail. Right now they are curving together almost making one continuous line.

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                                      Jose Ramos @smithdraws last edited by

                                      @smithdraws Thanks dude!

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                                        Jose Ramos @evilrobot last edited by

                                        @evilrobot Aaaaah, now I see what you wanted to say.I know what tangent means. Thanks and check it out.

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                                          aska @Jose Ramos last edited by

                                          @Jose-Ramos its such a cool picture that i have to make you consider another change...;) i like the bluish colours more, they look more deep... are you sure about red colours? I know, that everyone has different taste and opinion so dont worry about my opinion,, if you dont agree

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                                          • Jose Ramos
                                            Jose Ramos @aska last edited by

                                            @aska Hi Aska, thans for your comment, well, I´m not sure about red colours, but they do not dislike me either.
                                            I´ve tried to change the background color, and make it more late in time...I mean, more night time.
                                            which do you like more? 😉

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