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    Slowvember WIP - pls help

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    • aska
      aska last edited by

      Hi,
      I feel a bit stuck with my Slowvember. Probably i took on too complicated idea. Anyway, I will appreciate critiques that could get me going further. Thanks in advance guys! 🙂
      0_1511529768035_slovember.jpg

      Aska
      www.mugaska.com
      https://www.instagram.com/mugaska/
      https://www.etsy.com/uk/shop/mugaska

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      • Elaine B
        Elaine B @aska last edited by

        @aska Hey Aska, you were so helpful to me, so hope I can give you some good advice. I like the perspective,
        the tones are coming along nicely, and the big red elephant really pops. I'm finding the shadow behind the piano bear
        distracting. Maybe he should be under a spot light and the drape behind him darker. You have two focal points, and if the elephant is the main focal point, how is he being lit?

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        • aska
          aska @Elaine B last edited by

          @elaine-b thank you Elaine! 🙂 You gave me some direction and I will try to go that way and see if I can move this pic further. At this moment i feel tired with it and lost, as I am very unexperienced with color and lighting. Thanks again 🙂

          Aska
          www.mugaska.com
          https://www.instagram.com/mugaska/
          https://www.etsy.com/uk/shop/mugaska

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          • aska
            aska last edited by

            Hi,

            Thats what I got for now. It's going really slow. What do you think? Critiques are very welcome!

            @Elaine-B after I changed what you suggested, it become easier. What do you think?

            0_1511789246405_Slowvember 2017.jpg

            Aska
            www.mugaska.com
            https://www.instagram.com/mugaska/
            https://www.etsy.com/uk/shop/mugaska

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            • Elaine B
              Elaine B @aska last edited by

              @aska Looks great!

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              • aska
                aska last edited by

                Slowvember is soooo much work... but i am getting closer 🙂 If you have any critiques for me, I will be very grateful. I really want it to be my best piece.

                0_1512048635620_Slowvember 2017_2.jpg

                Aska
                www.mugaska.com
                https://www.instagram.com/mugaska/
                https://www.etsy.com/uk/shop/mugaska

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                • Elaine B
                  Elaine B @aska last edited by

                  @aska Hey Aska, this looks really good!

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                  • Jason Bowen
                    Jason Bowen SVS OG @aska last edited by

                    @aska It's a fun picture, I like the crowd and the elephant :)... crit wise I would look at the shadow under the piano and try and break up the mass of it. Google "pianist playing on stage" and look at the different lighting setups might help 🙂

                    https://www.instagram.com/jasonbowenoils/

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                    • aska
                      aska @Jason Bowen last edited by

                      @jason-bowen very useful comment, thank you!

                      Aska
                      www.mugaska.com
                      https://www.instagram.com/mugaska/
                      https://www.etsy.com/uk/shop/mugaska

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