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    • rcartwright
      rcartwright last edited by

      Hi Will,
      This image is from the transportation contest. I couldn't get it to upload so I liked it from my website.

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      https://www.scbwi.org/members/richard-cartwright/
      https://www.instagram.com/richardwcartwright/
      https://www.pinterest.ca/richcartwright3/art-of-richard-cartwright/
      https://www.richardwcartwright.ca/

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      • Eric Castleman
        Eric Castleman @Will Terry last edited by

        @will-terry yes, I have been atruggling with my slowvember piece, and I wanted to ask you about what is wrong with my brain when it comes to keeping consistent values while making a more white image.

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        EricCastleman.com

        SCBWI profile
        https://www.scbwi.org/members-public/eric-castleman

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        • Laurel Aylesworth
          Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

          Holy heck, I'm jumping at this opportunity. Here's my Slowvember piece I tried to make portfolio-worthy.

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          www.laurelaylesworth.com
          instagram.com/laurelaylesworth

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          • Laurel Aylesworth
            Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

            I'm sneaking in another one.

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            www.laurelaylesworth.com
            instagram.com/laurelaylesworth

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            • Blessings
              Blessings last edited by

              Thank you, if you pick this.
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              • Will Terry
                Will Terry @Will Terry last edited by

                @will-terry Looks like I have my work cut out for me! Thank you - I'll get on it! 🙂

                SVS Instructor
                http://willterry.com/

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                • Gary Wilkinson
                  Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                  This was a piece that I worked on in the past week and although I want to consider it to be finished, if there is anything you would recommend to improve upon then I would appreciate the advice. Thanks

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                  www.garywilkinsonart.com
                  www.instagram.com/gwillustration/
                  www.twitter.com/GWillustration

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                  • Will Terry
                    Will Terry @aska last edited by Will Terry

                    @aska Hi Aska,

                    Thank you for sharing this! It's a really fun piece! It's also the nightmare for many illustrators - the dreaded crowd scene! So here's what I would change:

                    1. If you bite it off you have to chew it. So you have to add more detail to the individual animals in each seat. Your characters aren't far enough away to paint as simple color/value shapes. So you need to add more detail to most of these.

                    2. BUT! There's a way to minimize the pain - by overlapping a few patrons in the foreground you can both increase your dynamic design and reduce the work load.

                    3. The main character is separated from the background with black line work while many of the characters are defined by value. You need to pick one or the other for consistency.

                    4. I would vary the animals/shapes of the others to create variety and interest.

                    Again - thank you!

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                    SVS Instructor
                    http://willterry.com/

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                      gooddharma last edited by

                      Hey glad I saw this! I am very new at SVS - first time looking at the forum. And I am not a student.. I graduated art school back in 1993! But I am trying to break free from the graphic design world and improve my illustration marketability. Would LOVE your feedback. This is not from a book, but it is my latest client work and still geared towards kids. My work is all vectors. 0_1513907794159_LOSS_TRANSPORT_6x18Banner-HalfSize.jpg

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                      • ?
                        A Former User last edited by

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                        This is called Glacier. I was trying a different style focused on more graphic shapes.

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                        • Jonas Zavacky
                          Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                          it is WIP, but I would like to hear some critique at this stage too!
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                          • aska
                            aska @Will Terry last edited by

                            @will-terry Thank you for your comments! I must admit that I got a bit overwhelmed with this piece because of the crowd. It was just too much for my abilities and speed of drawing. So i was secretly hoping that I can get away with it, drawing attention to the elephant, but clearly it didn't work 100% 😉 I will keep your valuable tips and try to rework it in few months. Thanks again 🙂

                            Aska
                            www.mugaska.com
                            https://www.instagram.com/mugaska/
                            https://www.etsy.com/uk/shop/mugaska

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                            • I
                              IanS last edited by

                              I've not been doing full illustrations with backgrounds for a while, just characters for the #animalalphabets challenge to keep my eye in. I'm not sure how much of a crit you can give based on a single character but I'd be happy to hear your thoughts! This was F for The Fly. They've gone from cute animals to horror for some reason. I think I'm better at the scarier animals than the cute ones!

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                                IanS last edited by

                                @ben-migliore That is lovely!

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                                • ?
                                  A Former User @IanS last edited by

                                  @ians thank you 😊

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                                  • tombarrettillo
                                    tombarrettillo last edited by tombarrettillo

                                    Here is one I am proud of, but feel it is lacking and could be even better.

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                                    https://www.youtube.com/@tombarrettart

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                                    • Judy Elizabeth Wilson
                                      Judy Elizabeth Wilson SVS OG @Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

                                      @laurel-aylesworth I love this Laurel!

                                      Website http://www.judyelizabethwilson.com/

                                      Instagram https://www.instagram.com/judyelizabethart/

                                      Sharing positivity through art.

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                                      • MissMushy
                                        MissMushy SVS OG last edited by

                                        Trying to figure out composition - still have to redesign moose as well. Any critiques welcome!0_1513956592115_mooseonloose.jpg

                                        www.instagram.com/artbymmartinez
                                        www.instagram.com/the.mindful.otter

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                                        • jbleau
                                          jbleau @Will Terry last edited by

                                          @will-terry I would appreciate any feedback you have time for on this piece. I am fairly new to SVS . Your classes have been very helpful. I am trying a career transition from Industrial Design to illustration. This is a stand alone sketch used for rendering practice. Not part of a larger story. I am a sketcher trying to develop my color and paint technique and less emphasis on line. Thank youalt text

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                                          • Jason Bowen
                                            Jason Bowen SVS OG last edited by

                                            0_1513962672309_me  two.jpg Hey Will, you can critique my slovember painting if you have time. Thanks 🙂

                                            https://www.instagram.com/jasonbowenoils/

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