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    • LauraA
      LauraA SVS OG @smceccarelli last edited by

      @smceccarelli If it's not too late, I like 1, 3, and 5. To me, 1 and 5 are similar, and I think part of what appeals in 5 is that the darker value of her hair makes a bold statement. But I like the determined expression of 1 and something about that hair in 3 reminds me of Peppermint Patti in Peanuts, but not too much. Also, in each of these three, the eyes are expressive without being doll-like. And in two of them she has a slightly turned up mouth, which looks thoughtful.

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      • smceccarelli
        smceccarelli Pro SVS OG @LauraA last edited by

        @lauraa Thank you - it's not too late! It seems 5 is a clear favourite, though the final will probably be a mashup of different elements. I will post the next evolution, for sure!

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        • jimsz
          jimsz last edited by

          For me, #5 by far

          @laurel-aylesworth said in Character Design - Feedback Welcome:

          @smceccarelli 3 and 5 capture all those things for me, for sure.

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          • lmrush
            lmrush Pro SVS OG last edited by

            I love 3, but they are all fabulous!

            Lisa Rush
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            • ?
              A Former User @smceccarelli last edited by

              @smceccarelli I'll be honest, I'm not sure 100% as to why, but #3 feels like a well rounded character in terms of personality. They're all great, but that #3 has something about it, the "it" factor. Fan of your work!

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              • djlambson
                djlambson last edited by

                #3 stands out for me as well..there's something there that relays confidence and strength. I can't wait to watch this progress!

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                • clipant
                  clipant last edited by

                  2 or 5 but now that I think about it I might be swayed by both poses having her casually resting two-by-fours on one shoulder supported by one arm while the other rests by her side. What I mean is that I might be more influenced by the pose than the character design.

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                  • ?
                    A Former User last edited by

                    #1 and #5 are my favorites. They show the most emotion to me. 🙂

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                    • kaitlinmakes
                      kaitlinmakes last edited by

                      Number 1 - she just looks so smart and determined! But they all have wonderful charm.
                      If the clientele is so young, is it best to go with a more simplistic version like number 6?

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                      • markoman
                        markoman last edited by

                        number 3

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                        • demotlj
                          demotlj SVS OG last edited by

                          Clearly from the diversity of opinions, you are going to have to write 6 books or give your character five friends! I love them all.

                          Laurie DeMott
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                          • K
                            Kat SVS OG last edited by

                            I like #5 the best. Love the hair!

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                            • smceccarelli
                              smceccarelli Pro SVS OG last edited by

                              Thank you all so much for the great feedback and comments! That made the next step so much easier. So I went for 5 but bringing in elements of 3 and 6. Here is a color (final) version, a couple of sketches and one sample spread I'm probably going to bring to finish....if I manage in the time left.
                              Obviously I don't have a lot of time to incorporate any feedback, but if you see glaring opportunities for improvement, let me know!
                              Ah, the stick she's holding is sort of the core of the story 🙂

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                              • TessaW
                                TessaW last edited by

                                Love it! Thanks for sharing it here. 😃

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                                • ScribblesByMike
                                  ScribblesByMike last edited by

                                  3 and 6 were my top choices but i love what you've done to get the final result. She looks great!

                                  Strange things are afoot at the Circle K!

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                                  • ArtofJoseGalue
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                                    • chrisaakins
                                      chrisaakins last edited by

                                      I really like it. She looks like a hard worker and super smart. I still miss the freckles, though. I look forward to seeing what you do with your story.

                                      Chris Akins
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                                      • smceccarelli
                                        smceccarelli Pro SVS OG last edited by

                                        Last update and last piece of feedback: which version would you use? It's only slight changes in the BG vs FG balance.
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                                        • NoWayMe
                                          NoWayMe last edited by

                                          The first or last one! Or maybe an in-between ? I like that the BG is pulled back on the first two although in the second one I feel it's definitely too much. The first one is better, but maybe still a tad too much ? Or maybe the FG character is a little too saturated..

                                          I love what you came up with for the character! I was too late for the pool, but my pick were also 5 and 3. I love how it turned out!

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                                          • juliepeelart
                                            juliepeelart SVS OG @smceccarelli last edited by

                                            @smceccarelli This is fantastic! I love the way you are able to capture so many expressions and people. I like 1 and 3, but it really depends on the story you are telling. To me the first one emphasizes the main character. She is headed off page and seems to have her own idea, and maybe a better idea of what to do than the others. The third shows that she is working together with all of these other people. It is a fun jumble. My kids would have a great time noticing what each person is doing in that one.

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