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    • ArtofAleksey
      ArtofAleksey last edited by

      This looks great overall. Ive been trying to do a thing with my art where I dont put anything in if it doesn’t have a purpose being in the final piece. It’s very hard. But if I use that filter for yours I would say you can use the trees and their branches to frame the shot. Like branches above where the moon is, overlapping, in black silhouette. Kinda so they form a frame around the moon and the characters. You already have the ground curvig in a way that forms the bottom frame for your characters. I would curve a few (only a few) branches on the top of the image to create a top frame (or you can make it angular branches if you want it to have a spookier vibe.

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      • ArtofAleksey
        ArtofAleksey last edited by

        This is what I mean by frame
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          braden H @Chip Valecek last edited by

          @chip-valecek

          That's a great idea, Chip. I think that's what I'll do!

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            braden H @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

            @gary-wilkinson

            Awesome. Thanks for taking a look. I agree that the shadows need to be a little stronger. More contrast better.

            I'm hoping that with colour the background will look more like a warm smoky haze, (thick thick forest fire smoke) but I may just make it a night scene πŸ™‚

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              braden H @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

              @nyrrylcadiz

              Yup, I'm planning on colouring it πŸ™‚

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                braden H @aaimiller last edited by

                @aaimiller

                Awesome advice. Thanks for the feedback πŸ™‚

                The halo around the sun through the haze is a great idea.

                I tried to take reference photos during the thick forest fire smoke where I live, but the poor camera on my phone wasn't up to it. I'm stuck trying to pull reference out of my head (which never really works)

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                • braden H
                  braden H @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                  @swordofodin

                  Great feedback, thank you πŸ™‚

                  Making sure there's nothing that doesn't belong in the final piece IS super hard. I'll try adding some branches to frame the piece a little more. However, I want to keep most (if not all, I may fix a couple) of the branches drooping sadly and mostly pointing at the girl and the deer.

                  I'm willing to bet I can both frame the girl and keep all the branches sad, though.

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                  • ArtofAleksey
                    ArtofAleksey @braden H last edited by

                    @art-of-b oohhh I see what you mean. You’re doing the branch droop deliberately.

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                      braden H @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                      @swordofodin

                      Yiss, but that doesn't mean I can't do branch droop and the framing you suggested πŸ™‚

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                      • ArtofAleksey
                        ArtofAleksey @braden H last edited by

                        @art-of-b droop away. Curious to see how you do it πŸ˜ƒ

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