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    • Erin.Cortese
      Erin.Cortese Moderator last edited by

      Hi Everyone, I am new to SVS and currently making my way through the “Creative Composition” course. I would love some feedback on my ‘25 items’ sketch before moving on to the refined sketch. Any and all feedback is welcome! I am planning on working through this one slowly and learn as much as possible in the process. Thanks.

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      • braden H
        braden H last edited by

        If I remember the creative composition course, one of the things to watch for and avoid is lines exiting through the corners. I'd move that stick in the lower right corner up, down, left or right ever so slightly.

        Other than that seems good compositionally so far 🙂

        I'm sure that as you refine things some tangents'll pop up that you'll have to fix, though (damn tangents always show up...)

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        • Erin.Cortese
          Erin.Cortese Moderator @braden H last edited by

          @art-of-b Yes, the tangents! Thank you, I forgot to look for those. I will probably have to correct several of them.

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          • Nyrryl  Cadiz
            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

            Looking great1! I’m really curious how you’ll handle this challenge in a forest.

            Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
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            • ?
              A Former User last edited by A Former User

              This is really great, love the composition and your little lizard character is so cute!
              The only thing I can think of is looking at the perspective on your cat and lizard characters, the trees are in perspective but the characters aren't, so it shouldn't be a huge change but I think it would make a difference 🙂
              Also maybe exaggerate the lizard's pose a bit more? really make it look like he's hiding with his arms outstretched against the tree or something 🙂

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              • Erin.Cortese
                Erin.Cortese Moderator @Guest last edited by

                @hannahmccaffery Thanks, thats great advice!

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