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    BIG WIP - critiques please?

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    • theprairiefox
      theprairiefox last edited by

      Very nice, fun concept. My only comment (besides the tangent issue with the teeth) is that the buttons look off to the right. I think it might be that the fabric line is down the center and with most clothes the buttons are down the center? Not a big deal but this will be a fun one to see finished.

      -The Prairie Fox
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      • ?
        A Former User last edited by

        Oooh I love the look of this, your style is wonderful, really looking forward to seeing it finished once you've added all the extra bits and bobs!

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        • Kristin Wauson
          Kristin Wauson last edited by

          Thanks everyone for your help so far! Here is the progress. I never know when to call these things finished. Do you think it’s done? Any other suggestions? Thanks in advance!

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            Kat SVS OG @Kristin Wauson last edited by

            @kristin-wauson oh so cute! I love the expressions on both their faces.

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            • Chip Valecek
              Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Kristin Wauson last edited by

              @kristin-wauson I think it looks great! Love the texture you have going on. My only suggestion, and it may be hard at this point, but the cats head looks like its looking past the mouse. If you could just tweak the head a little to turn it.


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              • Aaron Pierce
                Aaron Pierce last edited by

                Absolutely gorgeous! I love your color pallet and the details on the beanstalk.

                The only thing that stuck out - and it's really just a personal opinion bit - is that the facial expression on the mouse changed from rough to finished. He seems a bit more unimpressed now, vs. confused and a little surprised in the first one. I liked that look of "Why are you freaking out?" In the first picture.

                But again, that is entirely a personal opinion bit! The pic is great and I really love this finished(?) product 😃

                -Aaron

                Aaron "Aarpie!" Pierce
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                • Kristin Wauson
                  Kristin Wauson @Chip Valecek last edited by

                  @chip-valecek hmm I think you’re right. I’ll see what I can do.

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                  • Kristin Wauson
                    Kristin Wauson last edited by

                    @Aaron-Pierce Thank you! And on the expression, I think it’s because I gave him eyelids ... I thought it gave him more of a Henry the VIII smug expression, but I think you’re right. The original is better. I took them out. What do you think?

                    @Chip-Valecek I shifted his eyeballs to see if I could avoid redoing his entire head. Do you think it works now?

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                    • Chip Valecek
                      Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Kristin Wauson last edited by

                      @kristin-wauson yes that helped a lot!


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                      • Kristin Wauson
                        Kristin Wauson last edited by

                        Yay! Thanks for looking at it!

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                        • Aaron Pierce
                          Aaron Pierce last edited by

                          Perfection! 😃 Love it 😃

                          Aaron "Aarpie!" Pierce
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                          • Erin.Cortese
                            Erin.Cortese Moderator @Kristin Wauson last edited by

                            @kristin-wauson I love it! It has a really great feel, the mouse is fantastic. For me the bottom left corner is very dark. The strong contrast makes the focal point pop, but then pulls my eye down.

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                            • Kristin Wauson
                              Kristin Wauson @Aaron Pierce last edited by

                              @aaron-pierce thank you!

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                              • Kristin Wauson
                                Kristin Wauson @Erin.Cortese last edited by

                                @inkandspatter thank you! I’m calling it done for now because I have other things I have to work on, but I will keep this in mind and maybe revise it a bit later. I appreciate your comments!

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