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  • Lee White
    Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by 11 Nov 2015, 17:01

    Great work Leontine! Here's the image from the crit last night if you want to see it...Leontine Gaasenbeek Hedgehog.jpg

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    • Dulcie
      Dulcie SVS OG last edited by 11 Nov 2015, 18:51

      Looks amazing... Would be lovely to do a follow-up piece with hedgehog all happy at his party 🙂

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      • Leontine
        Leontine @Lee White last edited by 11 Nov 2015, 18:59

        @Lee-White Thanks Lee!

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        • Rich Green
          Rich Green SVS OG last edited by Rich Green 11 Nov 2015, 19:42 11 Nov 2015, 19:40

          I was looking at the paint over that Lee did and I think it loses some of the emotion. In your original placement of the little hedgehog he is sitting in a corner looking at the tree all alone. It is sad and you can feel his loneliness on Christmas.

          With Lee moving the hedge hog across the room, he may still appear sad but it no longer has that more specific feeling of being alone on Christmas as the cause of his sadness. I really miss that connection in the paint over.

          If part of the reason for flipping the hedge hog to the other side of the room was to make him face inwards and draw the viewers eye into the rest of the scene, I think that is fine. But I would then consider rearranging the room a bit to put the tree near him again so we can feel that connection more.

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          • joanie stone
            joanie stone last edited by 11 Nov 2015, 20:07

            I really like this piece and I think your character design is fantastic.

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            • Dulcie
              Dulcie SVS OG last edited by 11 Nov 2015, 20:42

              Ooh interesting points @Rich-Green, yes I see what you mean. In the first one hedgehog looks like he's staring forlornly at his only present...that connection gave you a clue about his thoughts. I agree maybe rearranging the furniture, eg swapping the bed with the tree/present, might help.

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              • Leontine
                Leontine @Rich Green last edited by 12 Nov 2015, 07:29

                @Rich-Green I agree with you and try and place the tree on the other side. maybe place the bed somewhere else as well. During the weekend, Ill work on it!

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                • Leontine
                  Leontine @Dulcie last edited by 12 Nov 2015, 07:30

                  @Dulcie Thank you, I agree and play around with it.

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                  • Lee White
                    Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by 12 Nov 2015, 15:07

                    I agree with Rich about moving some of the elements around. Moving the hedgehog over there was a composition fix. When you move a main character other things will definitely need to be adjusted around them.

                    Really cool piece. Can't wait to see where you go with it! : )

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                    • Leontine
                      Leontine @Lee White last edited by 15 Nov 2015, 08:26

                      @Lee-White @Rich-Green Thank you again for your help. Now with all nice comments I can take it further!

                      Leontine
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                      • smoke
                        smoke last edited by 15 Nov 2015, 11:07

                        Naamloos-1.jpg
                        sorry for my crappy sketch but it should make my point clear !this is what i see, because the cap is over the lightbal, its sort of blocking the light so the cap and the ceiling on top of the lamp should be darker, i know you have bouncing light , but thats less stronger, and you should change the moon or redo it because that looks to digital and not rendered enough!
                        overall, i realy like your piece,love the details composition, the carcters looking adorable , your a great artist! but understanding light is hard, i also struggle with it, but where learning everyday!! 😉

                        smoke

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                        • Leontine
                          Leontine @Nancy Gormezano last edited by 15 Nov 2015, 11:09

                          @Nancy-Gormezano thank youuuu!

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                          • Leontine
                            Leontine @johntatulliart last edited by 15 Nov 2015, 11:10

                            @johntatulliart Thank you John!

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                            • Leontine
                              Leontine @smoke last edited by 15 Nov 2015, 11:10

                              @smoke Thank you! Yes, there's still a lot of work on this one!

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