The moment before WIP

braden H

Missed last month since super busy with both class and a contract, but gonna do this one!

As is tradition, feedback is always welcome as I work along

First off pitch, thumbs, and rough comps! If you had to pick one of the rough comps, which would it be?

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Thanks, guys

Heather Boyd

@Braden-Hallett

Number 3 scares me the most (height and the fact I do not swim well -I would never jump). I like 1 a bit but 3 more. Maybe have some more classmates around the pool, sitting on the edge etc. the students in the pool look too perfect.

ArtofAleksey

Dang wasting no time. I like the tension in 3 but I really like the angle in 2 more with the kids trying to add more pressure for the other kid to jump

Jon Anderson

I vote 2 as it offers the most potential drama and suspense of the three. The last one is suspenseful but the boring shape of the pool kind of chills it compared to number 2.

ArtofJoseGalue

2! Vertigo is better represented on this thumbnail

JerrySketchyArt

2 or 3 (post must be longer than 8 letters so here are more words lalalalalala)

braden H

Not a lot of love for #1

Thanks for the feedback everyone!

Chip Valecek

@Braden-Hallett I like number one. Maybe add some sharks in the water

Heather Boyd

@Chip-Valecek sharks sharks poor guys, what about eels but I like like eels to so.

Chip Valecek

@Heather-Boyd LOL before Lee realized that Greatest Fear was a prompt from last year the prompt thread had a lot of shark talk going on. I figured that would fit in well with the swimming pool. My kids still think there is a shark in our pool at night.

Heather Boyd

@Chip-Valecek

And in the moonlight it would glow or sparkle that would be pretty.

Susan Marks

@Braden-Hallett I like 1 and 3 better because they each give me the sense of the jumper being apprehensive. With 2 I like the perspective and composition, but I don’t really feel the jumper’s emotions. I read into your statement that these would be emotions of the jumper. Now they could be of the watchers but I don’t experience the watchers in 2 as being anxious. Maybe a little bit impatient. I keep wanting to see someonenbiting their nails.

I’m impressed with how good all of the comps are.

burvantill

I like two. You have the opportunity to see his face and how scared he is with that one.
ps, I like your thumbnail layout. It soothing to my OCD.

sigross

@Braden-Hallett I think 3 as a first person perspective it makes it that extra bit daunting. The mention of sharks in the water made me think it could be turned into a cliff dive - that would make the background more dynamic with moving water and rocks sticking out on the way down.

MichaelaH

I go for 2 also, we get to see his "before" face

Kevin Longueil

@Braden-Hallett I vote for two also - seems like it has much more potential for story

I vote for number 2 as well, that composition is amazing and i like that we'd see the reaction on his face!

Nyrryl Cadiz

I prefer 2 but with a more closer shot of the character

Erin.Cortese

@nyrrylcadiz I really like the anxiety that #1 and #3 invoke. I feel like it puts the viewer right in the moment. I think #2 is the safe and reliable composition, but lacks a little in impact.

*After zooming in, I actually changed my mind a bit. When blown up, the perspective in number #2 gives a similar feeling of anxiety. So I think #2 and #3. But I still love the idea of the viewer being in the moment.

braden H

@Chip-Valecek Sharks in a pool is exactly what I was thinking of doing when the challenge was related to fear I brainstormed a bunch of ideas for 'the moment before' but kept coming back to the pool.

I may still do a version with sharks because I love the idea