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    • Erin.Cortese
      Erin.Cortese Moderator last edited by

      I really like #3, great sense of anticipation!

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      • Elizabeth Rose
        Elizabeth Rose last edited by

        I like the #1 a lot, its so funny, I love the expressions on the balloons. I also like #3 really well too. Its something everyone with a dog can relate too. It's sweet and makes me grin inside.

        I really like your sketch style, your sketches get the idea across well. I love the flow and movement. You go!

        I'm excited to see the progress 🙂

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        • marine
          marine @bnewman last edited by

          @bnewman @ErinCortese @Squirrelsize Thanks a lot!
          Yes seems n°3 works best, now onto refining the sketch... 🙂

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          • marine
            marine @marine last edited by

            So I've worked on the n°3, the dog waiting, and here are a few new sketches.

            My_Master.jpg

            N°1 is the original one
            N°2, I changed the perspective point
            N°3 an n°4, I've tried a paysage format with more of the dog's mess but I feel like the action is lost in too many details.

            So I think n°2 is the best, as the master's shadow and the dog in the light make more sense to the action. Maybe the dog is not sure if it's going to be a walk or a punishment for the mess...

            What do you think?

            Thanks!

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            • Erin.Cortese
              Erin.Cortese Moderator @marine last edited by

              @marine I love #2! Would like to see how the dog from number 1 works with comp #2. I think dog 1 communicates a little more clearly, it almost looks like dog 2 is tangled in his leash.

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              • Heather Boyd
                Heather Boyd @marine last edited by

                @marine

                I like #3 the best with the dog's gesture and the rose off its base -but I find the rest of the scene busy. I like how the "mess" is in the foreground with the dog and the background lends more to the order of the owner. But I would avoid leaving the furniture to the right and left cut in half -I'd like to see more of the couch. I like #2 because it is an easy read. 🙂

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                • Elizabeth Rose
                  Elizabeth Rose last edited by

                  Wow! those are all good. I really like #3. It seems to show more personality from the dog and the composition is more dynamic. My second is #2. because its simple and portrays the idea clearly.

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                  • Heather Bouteneff
                    Heather Bouteneff last edited by

                    I love the layout of 2 but I can almost see the wiggle butt in 3 and I love that, even though the place is a mess the dog is just like MY FRIEND IS HOME it's great

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                    • Susan Marks
                      Susan Marks @marine last edited by

                      @marine I'm with @Heather-Bouteneff --I really like the pose of the dog in #3. I:m ok with the mess--but I think that with the door open--the "moment" has occurred. How about combining dog from 3, with the still-closed door in #2? I think this concept is great for this prompt,

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                      • braden H
                        braden H last edited by

                        #2 hands down 🙂

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                        • marine
                          marine @braden H last edited by

                          Thank you all for your feedbacks!

                          I've re-worked the portrait format one, with a un-tangled dog 😉 @ErinCortese

                          And did modifications on the paysage format with more of the sofa and less space on the right, with open door and closed door. @Heather-Boyd @Heather-Bouteneff @Susan-Marks

                          But I still feel that in the portrait format n°1 here, the idea is more clear, I agree with @Squirrelsize and @Braden-Hallett. I also like that the dog is sitting still like an angel despite its mess.

                          Waiting-4.jpg

                          I guess now I need to refine my sketch and start rendering because time is flying! 🙂

                          Thanks again everyone, really appreciate your time and feedbacks!

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                          • MichaelaH
                            MichaelaH @marine last edited by

                            @marine Like nr. 1 the most

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                            • marine
                              marine @MichaelaH last edited by

                              @MichaelaH Thanks! Yes me too 🙂
                              Your little mouse profil pic is so cute!!

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                              • MichaelaH
                                MichaelaH @marine last edited by

                                @marine Thank You 😊 I have such dog at home and I think the first picture would be how I would draw him also. They are waiting and this waiting before, I think it is in picture 1, the dog is focused on the door, only one thing in head.

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                                • Erin.Cortese
                                  Erin.Cortese Moderator @marine last edited by

                                  @marine I love it! The mess, the position of the dog, the shadow of the owner, it all works together so well to create suspense.

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                                  • demotlj
                                    demotlj SVS OG last edited by

                                    I'll go against the grain and confuse the issue but I like #2 and #3 better because it looks more like the dog is "caught in the act" which lends to the tension of the picture. They are also more dynamic since the compositions are basically diagonal in direction whereas #1 is more symmetrical and thus more stable and calm. Since the prompt is the "moment before," the dynamism and tension of the second and third compositions I think fits better because the eye goes from the dog to the door and it looks as if the dog suddenly froze mid-mess.

                                    Laurie DeMott
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                                    • MichaelaH
                                      MichaelaH last edited by

                                      I think it depends what Marine wants us to see, I thought it is about how the dog is looking forward to his Buddy, who is coming home or did she want to see us how the dog is "caught in the act" destroying the house...If it is the firtst, than I am for the picture nr. 1, if it is "caught in the act" than like @demotlj said, 2 and 3 is better.

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                                      • marine
                                        marine @MichaelaH last edited by

                                        Thanks guys for getting back to me!
                                        I totally see what you mean @demotlj about the others comps being more dynamic and I've hesitated a long time before choosing n°1. My initial idea was about the dog waiting for its master to come back home for a walk, whereas in the meantime it put the place upside-down...

                                        I will now try to finish this one but not sure how to yet! 🙂

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                                        • marine
                                          marine @marine last edited by

                                          Hello,

                                          I've been working on my piece, experimenting with Procreate and a more loose style than what I'm used to do. Lots of things that don't satisfied me like I hoped it would look more loose than that but I guess I should go step by step 🙂 And I'm not used to paint so...

                                          Waiting_5 copy.jpg

                                          I'm not sure about the light/shadows, anyone would have feedback on it? Or on anything else really!

                                          Many thanks in advance!

                                          Just saw that I forgot the leash in the dog's mouth!!!😱 Will add it soon!

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                                          • Chip Valecek
                                            Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @marine last edited by

                                            @marine As far as the shadows go, i would watch your occlusion shadows. For example the carrot toy and the boot almost seem to float since they are lacking the occlusion shadow. Is the light coming from outside the door or is there a light source above that is on? I ask because the shadows seem to be coming from the light source of the door but the actual lighting looks to be coming from above. I would also remove the shadows from the water on the ground.

                                            I would not be happy to come home and see my dog trashed the house.


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