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    Mermay: "For you are worthy." (Need your feedback)

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    • Darian
      Darian SVS OG @Heather Boyd last edited by

      @Heather-Boyd Yes! The lighting sure makes option C stand out. Thank you for your feedback! Tied between C & E ( and even B of the third image )

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      • Whitney Simms
        Whitney Simms SVS OG last edited by

        @Darian I really like this piece. Love how the monsters are surrounding her. Love this tiny little mermaid who looks like the kindest thing ever. I like her fins in e the best. The only thing that I would like to see is the red changed. It seems like such a heavy color. In value and it’s is super muddy color. I like the color, but for this little creature I want a lighter color. I think that may even help with the lighting that you’re worried about. And the crown too. I almost want them to glow. She doesn’t seem to radiate light. I want her to eat sunshine. Like a glow worm toy. If your under 35 you will need to google for the reference!

        But that’s it. I love the piece! Very very strong!

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        • Darian
          Darian SVS OG @Whitney Simms last edited by

          @Whitney-Simms thank you for the awesome feedback! Yes, the red has got darker than I would have liked..thanks to a the idea of making it dark on the a light background. Could definitely use a lighter color for the mermaid..the red makes her too serious or mature while I was going for the opposite!

          May try pinks & see how it goes 🙂

          https://www.instagram.com/darian.pereira
          https://www.behance.net/darianpereira-
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          • MichaelaH
            MichaelaH @Darian last edited by

            @Darian I have to say, I like the red as color for the mermaid, it makes it new thing, but the value is to dark, maybe take the lightest color from the belly, like the one in the B for the darkest color and than make it lighter.

            https://www.instagram.com/michaelaheimlich/
            https://www.heimlich-illustration.de/

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            • shinjifujioka
              shinjifujioka SVS OG last edited by

              The curves and movement in this piece is so good! Don't have an opinion right now on a letter option. I think they could all turn out really great.

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              • Chip Valecek
                Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG last edited by

                Hope I am not to late to the party here but i like B and E the best.


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                • Darian
                  Darian SVS OG last edited by

                  @MichaelaH I love the red too. Unfortunately it got too dark..making it lighter would be a challenge with the background being light as well with the glowing light..love the opinions & feedback 🙂

                  @shinjifujioka welcome back! thank you for the positive support ..wish I could do them all..haha..can't wait to see your piece !

                  @Chip-Valecek you are never late to the party Chip! B & E do look pretty interesting..thanks!

                  However guys,

                  As I was working on it, I had a different idea. What if instead of being crowned, she is being bought back to life?

                  A work in progress..

                  you-are-worthy--04-@darian-.jpg

                  Is the idea coming across? I wanted to avoid showing the cracking of the statue to reveal the mermaid (i.e keeping the statue intact) to add more drama, but wasn't not sure if it would convey the concept..

                  https://www.instagram.com/darian.pereira
                  https://www.behance.net/darianpereira-
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                  • MichaelaH
                    MichaelaH @Darian last edited by MichaelaH

                    @Darian I love the new idea, what I would change, eyes in this grey color like the face or the white of the eyes, letting only the stroke stay, so that she looks like stone statue. Now the darker eyes is giving bit feeling of looking.
                    After that I would make the "alive" part till one eye (half of it) so that you see the color of the eye.

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                    https://www.heimlich-illustration.de/

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                    • Whitney Simms
                      Whitney Simms SVS OG last edited by

                      How fun is that! Super cute idea. Love it.

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                      • shinjifujioka
                        shinjifujioka SVS OG last edited by

                        Love the concept. That statue design is really awesome. I'd consider putting a couple of fractures/chips in the statue to sell the idea of stone more. Like an old, weathered statue you find in old, weathered gardens.

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                        • ShannonBiondi
                          ShannonBiondi SVS OG last edited by ShannonBiondi

                          l like B and E the best!

                          @abhainn_fionn

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                          • ShannonBiondi
                            ShannonBiondi SVS OG @ShannonBiondi last edited by

                            @ShannonBiondi But you've updated it now! 😃 Love the new concept. I love how the warm colour at the top of her head really makes it seem like she's being brought back to life...

                            @abhainn_fionn

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                            • Kevin Longueil
                              Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Darian last edited by

                              @Darian This is very cool! I do think the original concept is excellent though - the concept comes across clearly to me and i really like the diaphanous part of the mermaid design.... the new concept would need text i think for it to come across but the original does not - thumbnail A with mermaid from B would be my favorite of all of these - it will be great whichever way you go though - really nice!

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                              • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Darian last edited by

                                @Darian my best bet is on B/C

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                                • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                                  Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                                  @Darian nevermind, this new concept of yours is way cooler. I love it.

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                                  • Darian
                                    Darian SVS OG last edited by

                                    @MichaelaH very interesting inputs! thanks! The pupils of the eyes were the same color of the rest of the statue initially..I made them darker for readability :smiling_face_with_open_mouth_cold_sweat: The visible eye would be in the area of the shadow?

                                    @Whitney-Simms thanks!

                                    @shinjifujioka Will be adding grunge textures on top for the statue..would adding deterioration help if she's being brought back to life 🤔 maybe a little? thank you!

                                    @ShannonBiondi Glad that's coming across! that is the focus of the illustration!

                                    @Kevin-Longueil Ah yes. I have been feeling the same about the clarity. If only we could submit two entries! @Lisa-F

                                    @nyrrylcadiz awesome!

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                                    • MichaelaH
                                      MichaelaH @Darian last edited by

                                      @Darian Hi hi hi, yeah, I would make the eye the same color, like you did before, it looks more like statue than. ANd the living part, i Would make her left eye coming partly to live.

                                      https://www.instagram.com/michaelaheimlich/
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                                      • Darian
                                        Darian SVS OG last edited by

                                        mermay-2019-darian-pereira.jpg

                                        So which one will it be?

                                        A. is the original composition
                                        B. has the eyes lightened to the statue color
                                        C. is B with part of the left eye visible.
                                        D. is a darker version, emphasizing focus on the skull & the mermaid's head.

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                                        • Coreyartus
                                          Coreyartus Moderator last edited by

                                          Personally, I prefer D. The dark helps emphasize the magic of the helmet, which is really what the crux of the story is about. This image is about her transformation, and you're pulling the attention to that fact by helping the rest of the image recede into the background. That makes it easier to understand, in my opinion. So D's my favorite. 🙂

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                                          • MichaelaH
                                            MichaelaH last edited by

                                            I Like D also, the darker values makes the skull really visible, like magic.

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