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    Mermay: "For you are worthy." (Need your feedback)

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    • MichaelaH
      MichaelaH @Darian last edited by MichaelaH

      @Darian I love the new idea, what I would change, eyes in this grey color like the face or the white of the eyes, letting only the stroke stay, so that she looks like stone statue. Now the darker eyes is giving bit feeling of looking.
      After that I would make the "alive" part till one eye (half of it) so that you see the color of the eye.

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      • Whitney Simms
        Whitney Simms SVS OG last edited by

        How fun is that! Super cute idea. Love it.

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        • shinjifujioka
          shinjifujioka SVS OG last edited by

          Love the concept. That statue design is really awesome. I'd consider putting a couple of fractures/chips in the statue to sell the idea of stone more. Like an old, weathered statue you find in old, weathered gardens.

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          • ShannonBiondi
            ShannonBiondi SVS OG last edited by ShannonBiondi

            l like B and E the best!

            @abhainn_fionn

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            • ShannonBiondi
              ShannonBiondi SVS OG @ShannonBiondi last edited by

              @ShannonBiondi But you've updated it now! 😃 Love the new concept. I love how the warm colour at the top of her head really makes it seem like she's being brought back to life...

              @abhainn_fionn

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              • Kevin Longueil
                Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Darian last edited by

                @Darian This is very cool! I do think the original concept is excellent though - the concept comes across clearly to me and i really like the diaphanous part of the mermaid design.... the new concept would need text i think for it to come across but the original does not - thumbnail A with mermaid from B would be my favorite of all of these - it will be great whichever way you go though - really nice!

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                • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                  Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Darian last edited by

                  @Darian my best bet is on B/C

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                  • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                    Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                    @Darian nevermind, this new concept of yours is way cooler. I love it.

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                    • Darian
                      Darian SVS OG last edited by

                      @MichaelaH very interesting inputs! thanks! The pupils of the eyes were the same color of the rest of the statue initially..I made them darker for readability :smiling_face_with_open_mouth_cold_sweat: The visible eye would be in the area of the shadow?

                      @Whitney-Simms thanks!

                      @shinjifujioka Will be adding grunge textures on top for the statue..would adding deterioration help if she's being brought back to life 🤔 maybe a little? thank you!

                      @ShannonBiondi Glad that's coming across! that is the focus of the illustration!

                      @Kevin-Longueil Ah yes. I have been feeling the same about the clarity. If only we could submit two entries! @Lisa-F

                      @nyrrylcadiz awesome!

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                      • MichaelaH
                        MichaelaH @Darian last edited by

                        @Darian Hi hi hi, yeah, I would make the eye the same color, like you did before, it looks more like statue than. ANd the living part, i Would make her left eye coming partly to live.

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                        • Darian
                          Darian SVS OG last edited by

                          mermay-2019-darian-pereira.jpg

                          So which one will it be?

                          A. is the original composition
                          B. has the eyes lightened to the statue color
                          C. is B with part of the left eye visible.
                          D. is a darker version, emphasizing focus on the skull & the mermaid's head.

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                          • Coreyartus
                            Coreyartus Moderator last edited by

                            Personally, I prefer D. The dark helps emphasize the magic of the helmet, which is really what the crux of the story is about. This image is about her transformation, and you're pulling the attention to that fact by helping the rest of the image recede into the background. That makes it easier to understand, in my opinion. So D's my favorite. 🙂

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                            • MichaelaH
                              MichaelaH last edited by

                              I Like D also, the darker values makes the skull really visible, like magic.

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                              • Darian
                                Darian SVS OG last edited by Darian

                                Yes! I liked the mood of D as well so thought I'd share it. Wondering if it's too dark for a children's illustration.

                                Will be adding more of the glowing light hitting the dinosaurs as rim light..

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