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    "The Moment Before I Lost My Mom" Kids Book Project Progress for SCBIW Portfolio Preview. . .and eventually Self Publish by April 2020

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    • Elizabeth Rose
      Elizabeth Rose @BichonBistro last edited by

      @BichonBistro Hahahahaha, the subconscious reaction. Yes! What you said is exactly what I want viewers to get from it! Wow, Thank you so much for all your helpful input. It helps more than you know 🙂

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      • jdeebella
        jdeebella last edited by

        This is a beautiful project and what a moving story. ❤ . I wish you the best with the book. ❤

        Jdeebella
        Illustrator and maker
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        • Elizabeth Rose
          Elizabeth Rose @jdeebella last edited by

          Thanks @jdeebella, I appreciate it 🙂

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          • Elizabeth Rose
            Elizabeth Rose last edited by

            Doing some Humming bird sketch studies. Probably will be working on some flower sketch studies tomorrow 🙂

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            • sarahlawrence
              sarahlawrence @Elizabeth Rose last edited by

              @Squirrel-Size really excited to see this grow into a picture book.

              I definitely agree you can remove the word “can” from most pages. You could also combine spreads 5 and 6 into one spread, leaving room for the baby girl goat to show some sadness on her own.

              Here’s my thoughts on the text/ what I’d change it to:

              1: My Garden is my happy place
              2: I come here to escape
              3: Especially when I’m tired or sad
              4: Here I can help things grow
              5: Here I can smell things
              6: Here I can feel happiness growing
              7: When I want to share my happiness...
              8:
              9: I take it to someone who is sad
              10:... like my mom
              11: ( I don’t think you need any text here your image is pretty powerful) or something like “ she’s not here anymore “
              12: So I remember her through my flowers

              I love the emotions in this, also there definitely need to be more goats in children’s books, they’re super cute.

              Hope this helps, just my two cents 🙂

              Sarah

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              • Elizabeth Rose
                Elizabeth Rose @sarahlawrence last edited by

                Thanks @sarahlawrence for the input! I'll fiddle around with the text some more! Love seeing your take on it 🙂 Thanks

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                • Elizabeth Rose
                  Elizabeth Rose last edited by

                  Storyboard sketch
                  IMG_0652.jpg

                  The Drawing Below:
                  Okay! I spent about 4 hours sketching this on Friday and about 2 hours doing sketch studies. I wished I could have completed it, but I moved my tiny house Saturday and it took my WHOLE day! Sunday is family time. I think I'm gonna just have to give something up day to day to have at least an hour a day to work on this and then 6 hours on Friday. I think, I need to set up a schedule of what needs to be done, so I don't fall behind before my deadline. Wow, time management can be hard! I feel like I'm back in art school again lol
                  I plan to keep most of the finished drawings black and white without any color for the dummy book. And then this winter I plan to complete them with color and format it.

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                  • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                    Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                    So lovely!😭😭😭😭❤️❤️❤️

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                    • MOO
                      MOO SVS OG last edited by

                      I love your finished piece and I think it is going to be a beautiful book when you're done. Very touching. The dummy is looking good. I have no critiques at this time.

                      Marsha Ottum Owen

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                      • Elizabeth Rose
                        Elizabeth Rose last edited by

                        Sooooo, last night, I figured out my scheduling for what all I need to have done before my dummy book deadline. (Aug 31st). Just over a month left. Ugh! I have to get at least two spreads drawn out a week! This is going to be an interesting 6 weeks.
                        Below is one of the spreads I plan to work on this week (Spread 5). I'm leaning towards 7 & 8. How about you all?

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                        • Elizabeth Rose
                          Elizabeth Rose last edited by

                          Okay, spread 5! I started this baby last night! Before I hit the detail stage (hopefully tonight/probably this weekend), You all let me know your thoughts if you have any 🙂

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                            A Former User @Elizabeth Rose last edited by

                            @Squirrel-Size Lovely sketch...the big sun hat is a nice touch!😄 and the little birds are very cute 😍

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                            • Elizabeth Rose
                              Elizabeth Rose last edited by

                              Storyboard sketch (SPREAD 9):
                              IMG_0650 2.jpg
                              Detail study sketch:
                              IMG_0632.jpg
                              Actual Layout:
                              YEY! I got everything sketch, but now I just gotta finished both my new layouts, finished up the layout from last week. And finish my Croc Picnic pice for the monthly prompted. Wow, I think I know what I'm doing with my three day weekend.
                              Let me know what you all think? I'm wondering about the stepping stones on the first page, they look like they are floating a bit. But that could be remedied during the color stage. Also should I have them going completely across the page vs. halfway like they are now? Let me know your opinions 🙂
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                                A Former User @Elizabeth Rose last edited by

                                @Squirrel-Size
                                Environment heavy spreads have always been my favorite! This tree home looks like the coziest place to live. I like your decision of having the elements from the right side of the spread merge into the left side. I think continuing the stones until the left-most part of the spread could be a good idea. Then the reader can visually follow the stones (path) the character took to the right spread. I also wonder if adding more decorative elements (like the flowers) to the left spread would be a good idea. I like that the text balances the image in the composition, but wonder if more should be added or if keeping it very simple is the way to go. And I think to answer this, I would just continue the treatment of the other spreads you have on this one. So if they've had a lot of breathing room this one works as is. Something else to think about is pacing. I feel like this is leading up to the climax of the story, so maybe thinking about how you can build that anticipation until the next spread (which I'm reading as the climax). I definitely don't have the answers to these questions, but hope it's something that can get you thinking some more about your story's layout and how it reads. Best of luck!

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                                • BichonBistro
                                  BichonBistro @Elizabeth Rose last edited by

                                  @Squirrel-Size another beautiful piece ❤️

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                                  • BichonBistro
                                    BichonBistro @Elizabeth Rose last edited by

                                    @Squirrel-Size I saw your hummingbird sketches on IG—so good!

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                                    • APHOTICMOTH
                                      APHOTICMOTH Moderator last edited by

                                      I'm definitely buying this when its published. Bittersweet, and beautiful.

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                                      • MOO
                                        MOO SVS OG last edited by

                                        How is the project going?

                                        Marsha Ottum Owen

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                                        • Julia
                                          Julia last edited by

                                          sooo inspiring! I am struggling with my own little story for more than 1 year now, not doing much (and having 3 other stories now that I want to illustrate!). When I see your work and dedication, I feel I can achieve this too. Thank you so much! I just decided to go to bed early today to set again my morning routine and finally drawing my book!

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                                          • Julia
                                            Julia last edited by

                                            https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TQd6bO4aDKg
                                            a video that made me re-design my thumbnails... yours are great, so I don't think it would be as useful as for me, but I though you'd enjoy the video as well. Cheers !

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