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    A character turn around...critiques welcome

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      JennyJones @StudioLooong last edited by

      @StudioLooong @Chip-Valecek @Nyrryl-Cadiz Thanks for the advice everyone. I have looked at this drawing for a LONG time and tweaked minuscule details over and over. Her eyes gave me troubles and so did the cheeks and so did those blessed legs. You guys nailed it! If you had seen how many erases and draw overs I did.... sometimes getting there is so hard.

      I do want her eyes smiling a little bit bigger and to have those cheeks push up more. My usual eye is a dot or a dot with a squiggle over top. So this is new territory. I’m going to work on it a bit more tonight and post the changes. Thanks again.

      @Chip-Valecek thanks for the cutie comments. She’s a keeper for sure. One of those kids who says funny stuff everyday that you wish you had written down!

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        JennyJones last edited by JennyJones

        Here is the next installment after a longer than I wanted break. As a teacher I had to put a halt on some personal projects to prepare my classroom (and heart) for my new group of little ones. But I’m ready for school to begin and my mind is freed to think about art again!

        I fixed several problems in the line work and colored the piece on Procreate. I still want to go in and do it traditionally, so I guess I will call this a color study.

        It seems a bit flat to me and I cannot seem to figure out what to do to tweak it just right without trying to be hyper realistic. Any thoughts?

        Also I’m wondering if the colors are blah, or too saturated. I’m still not sure about some of it but I very much want to improve. Any critiques are welcome.

        Annie_Gets_Glasses 4.jpg

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        • Coreyartus
          Coreyartus Moderator last edited by

          I downloaded the image and put it in Photoshop, then adjusted the levels a bit... By making the darks darker, it seems like there's more dimension (to me, anyway). Is that something you're interested in doing? Because sometimes "flat" is part of what makes it interesting... There are a lot of successful illustrators that exploit "flatness"...1565758963194-annie_gets_glasses-4-resized.jpg

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            JennyJones @Coreyartus last edited by

            @Coreyartus Thanks for doing an adjustment. I guess I do like a flatter look. When I go back and look at some of my favorite illustrators I guess their style is a little muted too. I guess I will have to make several more pieces and see how I feel after that....

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            • chrisaakins
              chrisaakins last edited by chrisaakins

              @JennyJones First of all, I love this! I am a sucker for realism. One note about the quarter turn. Her mouth drops down a little giving the impression of a huge upper lip. Maybe inch the mouth up a bit to match the others. It could be that her nose moves up. I am not exactly sure. I like the muted look too. Makes it look more like a watercolor drawing. @Coreyartus But I do like yours too.

              Chris Akins
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                JennyJones @chrisaakins last edited by JennyJones

                @chrisaakins thanks for the feedback! That quarter turn face has given me ( literally) hours of fits. I can’t even say how many times I erased and redrew the mouth. And then the nose and chin and cheeks because of the mouth. I love the realistic/not realistic too. Some of the illustrators who inspire me are Sophie Blackall, Freya Blackwood, Stephanie Graegin, Eliza Wheeler, and the like. I am starting my master copy work and they feature quite a bit.

                Anyway, thanks again I will try some more tweaks. I really want it to be better and just don’t feel like it’s there yet. Naggingly annoying to not be able to get it done to my satisfaction. Baby steps!

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                  JennyJones @chrisaakins last edited by

                  @chrisaakins Ok here are the tweaks to the mouth and nose. I think it looks a little better and more like what I was going for. Better?

                  Annie_Gets_Glasses 5.jpg

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                    BichonBistro @JennyJones last edited by

                    @JennyJones Yes! as someone who needed glasses early on, I like this concept and your real-life character is adorable—great job getting her developed on paper.

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                      JennyJones @BichonBistro last edited by

                      @BichonBistro Awesome! Thanks. The concept is Annie getting glasses and being thrilled about it. So many books are about children being worried and apprehensive. But I want there to be one about being excited about it.

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                        BichonBistro @JennyJones last edited by

                        @JennyJones can’t wait to see the progression of this concept 👍🏻😊

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                        • chrisaakins
                          chrisaakins last edited by

                          @JennyJones Yes! Much better.

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                            RJWoodworth last edited by

                            @JennyJones Just wanted to say great work! She looks like a very loveable character!

                            Riley J Woodworth
                            AKA "Baldy" "Little Man" & "Jamal"

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                              JennyJones last edited by

                              Thanks. I’m still working on the story. But maybe at the same time working on a few of the illustrations that I want to include. Thanks for the encouragement! I’ll post so progress here when there is some...

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