Illustration for critique please

audrey dowling

but then, there wouldn't be the effect of the snake wanting to eat the cake though...

Lydia M

You'd have to re-do it so his head is facing the cake. He could still have the same expression and you'd see what he's so excited about when you open the card.

audrey dowling

yep that's a good idea. thanks @gimmehummus

audrey dowling

better isn't it?

bharris

I like the adjustments you've made! Really cute idea!

audrey dowling

thank you @bharris

Kevin Longueil

That top edge looks better for sure - it is neat how in the first one you see the face and the cake right away and then open it up for the text..... i am just thinking out loud here - i like what you have done and think it looks great - but would it be possible to have an unequally folded card where the tail section of the trifold idea is longer than the other two sections? so that you see the cake and the head right away and then open it... it really is good the way you have it - just thought i would share that idea

audrey dowling

I thought about it Kevin, and finally I went with this idea, as I won't really have this card printed anyway. it was more about practice. So I just kept it standard. But if it eventually gets printed, I will definitely suggest the idea to the client
thanks for sharing your thoughts

Dulcie

It's a great idea, he/she is a lot of fun and beautifully painted!

Joy Heyer

This is a very cute card! Quick thought...you could keep the original fold with the snake looking at the cake and then paint the snake's head and tail on the inside of the flaps with the eyes looking the other way. Not sure that made sense... Basically you would draw two heads and two tails. One on the outside and one on the inside. Anyway, just a thought.

Chip Valecek

@Joy-Heyer made a good point. I like that idea.

MOO

Very cute and creative idea I like it. I also liked hearing the others feedback. I think there are some who are better at seeing the little things that can enhance the work.

Lydia M

Looks great! There's a payoff (invitation to go eat cake) when they open it.

Leontine

Love it! There's the first card for your collection! Chapeau!

Lee Holland

Really nice audrey well done. you painted it really well.