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    • noah.albrecht
      noah.albrecht @TwiggyT last edited by

      Thanks @TwiggyT! Great points there, I could increase the head size a bit, and thank you for the kind words!

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      • noah.albrecht
        noah.albrecht last edited by

        Hey guys, thanks again for all of the feedback! Here's my second pass on the loose pencil phase...

        svslearn-prompt-sept19-rough_v2.jpg

        Let me know what y'all think!

        Thanks!

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          Kat SVS OG last edited by

          Really fun idea, and I love the kid with the glasses having a blank expression. Like he’s too shocked to speak! I’m a little confused about the girls eyebrows, tho. She looks worried, sort of. Maybe just tweak the shape or placement of them, and her attitude will change. I love the Viking!

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          • MOO
            MOO SVS OG @noah.albrecht last edited by

            @noah-albrecht I like vikings! 🙂

            Marsha Ottum Owen

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            • holleywilliamson
              holleywilliamson SVS OG @noah.albrecht last edited by

              @noah-albrecht looks really cute. I like your characters and expressions. I do think the Vikings head should be as big as the kids heads. If you want to keep his proportions you could just make him bigger all together.

              https://www.instagram.com/holleywilliamsonart/
              http://holleywilliamson.com

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              • noah.albrecht
                noah.albrecht last edited by

                Based off the feedback, I just did a sketch in my sketchbook for a reimagining of the large Viking (and little girl). What do you guys think?

                IMG_0861.JPG

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                • MichaelaH
                  MichaelaH @noah.albrecht last edited by

                  @noah-albrecht Better

                  https://www.instagram.com/michaelaheimlich/
                  https://www.heimlich-illustration.de/

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                  • Shara Mills
                    Shara Mills last edited by

                    Yup, loving it all the way. The texture, characters, proportions, expressions. Love, love, love!

                    I see where the eyebrow and head size comments are coming from, but I actually like the girl and Viking in the second drawing better. Their relationship. Her pose. I don’t even mind the eyebrows, but I can see a subtle shift being possibly stronger. And with your fun stylization I don’t mind the head size differences. She’s a smaller girl and has a smaller head than her peers. That says to me that heads vary according to individual character design in this illustration. I’m totally fine with that. Vikings are more brawn and a big heart than brain anyway, right? 😉

                    I cannot wait to see the final illustration!

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                    • noah.albrecht
                      noah.albrecht @Shara Mills last edited by

                      @Shara-Mills Thank you so much for the great feedback, and kind words! I'm looking forward to getting the final done! ^_^

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                      • chrisaakins
                        chrisaakins last edited by

                        @noah-albrecht I like the simpler version. It's fun and she is so happy with herself. However one of the things that our fearless leaders keep bringing up in their critiques is how it tells a story. A pose might not tell us it is a school or that others are shocked.

                        Chris Akins
                        www.chrisakinsart.com
                        www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                        • Annaaronson
                          Annaaronson @noah.albrecht last edited by

                          @noah-albrecht This is completely adorable. I love the way you draw children and the energy of your sketching style. I think your composition is really strong here. I can't wait to see the finished piece.

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                          • noah.albrecht
                            noah.albrecht @chrisaakins last edited by

                            @chrisaakins Thanks Chris for the great feedback. Great point! I'm attacking the final with better storytelling in mind. ^_^

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                            • noah.albrecht
                              noah.albrecht @Annaaronson last edited by

                              @Annaaronson Thank you Anna for the kind words! I'm having fun with this and can't wait to finish and post the final!

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                              • noah.albrecht
                                noah.albrecht last edited by

                                Hey y'all, so in true WIP spirit, here's a composition sketch I did in my pocket Field Notes sketchbook (which I highly recommend btw). I wanted to drive home the story in the image, and I think the classroom setting is key. I really value all of your feedback, so let me know what you guys think :

                                IMG_0913.jpg

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                                • demotlj
                                  demotlj SVS OG @noah.albrecht last edited by

                                  @noah-albrecht I'm really enjoying your development of this. I would move the girl a little off center because, as Jake, Lee, and Will have pointed out, you want to be careful about the crotch area 🙂

                                  Laurie DeMott
                                  instagram.com/demotlj

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                                  • K
                                    Kat SVS OG last edited by

                                    I love this! Great happy posture with the girl, and I love the totally bland expression of the Viking. Can’t wait to see it finished.

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                                    • theprairiefox
                                      theprairiefox @noah.albrecht last edited by

                                      @noah-albrecht I like the classroom and being able to see the teacher's face. You might want to think about the children. With them faced away from you the viewer will not be able to see their response to the Viking. If you rotate the angle I think you might be able to get a lot more bang for your buck.

                                      -The Prairie Fox
                                      https://www.instagram.com/theprairiefox
                                      https://www.theprairiefox.com

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                                      • chrisaakins
                                        chrisaakins last edited by

                                        @noah-albrecht To build on what @theprairiefox said you might also want to angle it so that the frame and the line of the wall are not parallel to each other. Will Terry (in composition 2.0) says that makes it look amateurish. You have a great idea. I look forward to seeing how it plays out.

                                        Chris Akins
                                        www.chrisakinsart.com
                                        www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                                        • peteolczyk
                                          peteolczyk last edited by

                                          Wow, love your characters

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                                          www.instagram.com/pete_illustrations

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                                          • J
                                            jdubz last edited by

                                            Lookin good. Might be fun to have his horns stabbing into the ceiling 🙂

                                            Josh White
                                            https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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