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    • noah.albrecht
      noah.albrecht last edited by

      Everyone was shocked to see her show up to school with a giant Viking!
      svslearn-prompt-sept19.jpg

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      • MichaelaH
        MichaelaH @noah.albrecht last edited by

        @noah-albrecht Looking great, one thing I would change is, that the girl holds the sword, but the point of the sword is on the floor, because it is soooo heavy or the viking is helping to hold the sword.

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        • noah.albrecht
          noah.albrecht @MichaelaH last edited by

          @MichaelaH Awesome feedback, thank you so much! I think maybe the girl with a smug look on her face and arms crossed, leaning on the Viking, while he's holding the sword, maybe propped on his shoulder.

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          • TwiggyT
            TwiggyT last edited by

            This is such a cool concept. I like the idea of making the girl smug and the sword heavy.

            I'd play on making the viking even more imposing. I feel like his head needs to be a little bigger, too. All the teachers and kids have oversized heads, so the viking looks a little out of place in that respect.

            I really like your drawing style. Very fluid and nice.

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            • noah.albrecht
              noah.albrecht @TwiggyT last edited by

              Thanks @TwiggyT! Great points there, I could increase the head size a bit, and thank you for the kind words!

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              • noah.albrecht
                noah.albrecht last edited by

                Hey guys, thanks again for all of the feedback! Here's my second pass on the loose pencil phase...

                svslearn-prompt-sept19-rough_v2.jpg

                Let me know what y'all think!

                Thanks!

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                • K
                  Kat SVS OG last edited by

                  Really fun idea, and I love the kid with the glasses having a blank expression. Like he’s too shocked to speak! I’m a little confused about the girls eyebrows, tho. She looks worried, sort of. Maybe just tweak the shape or placement of them, and her attitude will change. I love the Viking!

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                  • MOO
                    MOO SVS OG @noah.albrecht last edited by

                    @noah-albrecht I like vikings! 🙂

                    Marsha Ottum Owen

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                    • holleywilliamson
                      holleywilliamson SVS OG @noah.albrecht last edited by

                      @noah-albrecht looks really cute. I like your characters and expressions. I do think the Vikings head should be as big as the kids heads. If you want to keep his proportions you could just make him bigger all together.

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                      • noah.albrecht
                        noah.albrecht last edited by

                        Based off the feedback, I just did a sketch in my sketchbook for a reimagining of the large Viking (and little girl). What do you guys think?

                        IMG_0861.JPG

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                        • MichaelaH
                          MichaelaH @noah.albrecht last edited by

                          @noah-albrecht Better

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                          • Shara Mills
                            Shara Mills last edited by

                            Yup, loving it all the way. The texture, characters, proportions, expressions. Love, love, love!

                            I see where the eyebrow and head size comments are coming from, but I actually like the girl and Viking in the second drawing better. Their relationship. Her pose. I don’t even mind the eyebrows, but I can see a subtle shift being possibly stronger. And with your fun stylization I don’t mind the head size differences. She’s a smaller girl and has a smaller head than her peers. That says to me that heads vary according to individual character design in this illustration. I’m totally fine with that. Vikings are more brawn and a big heart than brain anyway, right? 😉

                            I cannot wait to see the final illustration!

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                            • noah.albrecht
                              noah.albrecht @Shara Mills last edited by

                              @Shara-Mills Thank you so much for the great feedback, and kind words! I'm looking forward to getting the final done! ^_^

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                              • chrisaakins
                                chrisaakins last edited by

                                @noah-albrecht I like the simpler version. It's fun and she is so happy with herself. However one of the things that our fearless leaders keep bringing up in their critiques is how it tells a story. A pose might not tell us it is a school or that others are shocked.

                                Chris Akins
                                www.chrisakinsart.com
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                                • Annaaronson
                                  Annaaronson @noah.albrecht last edited by

                                  @noah-albrecht This is completely adorable. I love the way you draw children and the energy of your sketching style. I think your composition is really strong here. I can't wait to see the finished piece.

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                                  • noah.albrecht
                                    noah.albrecht @chrisaakins last edited by

                                    @chrisaakins Thanks Chris for the great feedback. Great point! I'm attacking the final with better storytelling in mind. ^_^

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                                    • noah.albrecht
                                      noah.albrecht @Annaaronson last edited by

                                      @Annaaronson Thank you Anna for the kind words! I'm having fun with this and can't wait to finish and post the final!

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                                      • noah.albrecht
                                        noah.albrecht last edited by

                                        Hey y'all, so in true WIP spirit, here's a composition sketch I did in my pocket Field Notes sketchbook (which I highly recommend btw). I wanted to drive home the story in the image, and I think the classroom setting is key. I really value all of your feedback, so let me know what you guys think :

                                        IMG_0913.jpg

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                                        • demotlj
                                          demotlj SVS OG @noah.albrecht last edited by

                                          @noah-albrecht I'm really enjoying your development of this. I would move the girl a little off center because, as Jake, Lee, and Will have pointed out, you want to be careful about the crotch area 🙂

                                          Laurie DeMott
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                                          • K
                                            Kat SVS OG last edited by

                                            I love this! Great happy posture with the girl, and I love the totally bland expression of the Viking. Can’t wait to see it finished.

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