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    October contest WIP as is tradition. Feedback always appreciated :)

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    • xin li
      xin li @braden H last edited by

      @Braden-Hallett yeah. Maybe smaller penny and a larger pooch will just do. I feel like this is a very dynamic scene, and I love the concept. But the choice of composition is a bit static: 2 equally sized characters, each ocuppy approximately half of the page. Hope this make sense.

      Web: www.lixin.no
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      • braden H
        braden H @xin li last edited by

        @xin-li Absolutely makes sense 😃 I'll fiddle about with scale before inking. Thanks! I like the storytelling idea that the neighbour kid was not just a jerk, but older, too. Or maybe it's her older brother, lol 🙂

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        • braden H
          braden H last edited by

          Work progresses 🙂

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          • Nyrryl  Cadiz
            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @braden H last edited by

            @Braden-Hallett i just realised this but where did she get the human body? 😱😱😱😱

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            • braden H
              braden H @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

              @Nyrryl-Cadiz According to Penny 'any and all bodies, human or otherwise, become property of the owner of the domicile in which said body currently resides at time of death'.

              Billy DID come over to play, recently...

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              • Coley
                Coley @braden H last edited by

                @Braden-Hallett omg LoL. I laughed out loud. I also looked at the gravestone and grave in the BG which I hadn't before.. laughing out loud again snort snort🤣🤣![alt text](image url)

                https://www.instagram.com/nicoleledrewmay/

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                • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                  Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @braden H last edited by

                  @Braden-Hallett oh god... 😱😅

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                  • braden H
                    braden H @Coley last edited by

                    @Coley I'm glad it's not too subtle, lol 🙂

                    @Nyrryl-Cadiz It's all okay because Penny's got her pupper back 🙂

                    And Billy was a total jerk!

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                    • braden H
                      braden H last edited by

                      Reinked Penny and the Pupper.

                      Added the BG trees. Gave some value to the fence.

                      Gonna fiddle with some clouds in the sky mebbe.

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                      • xin li
                        xin li @braden H last edited by

                        @Braden-Hallett Great piece. You really nailed it again. Wow. Very interesting take on the topic. It took the third read to discover Billy's head by the grave. I first thought it was just dirt, or grass or something. Was it intensional?

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                        • braden H
                          braden H @xin li last edited by

                          @xin-li Thanks! And no, third read is definitely not intentional (maybe second read?) My plan is to reinforce the contours a little bit on the grave and shovel then maybe give Billy a baseball cap 🙂

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                          • jakecrowe
                            jakecrowe @braden H last edited by

                            @Braden-Hallett Maybe making Billy a red head in an earthy graveyard would help him pop.

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                            • braden H
                              braden H @jakecrowe last edited by

                              @jakecrowe Sadly the entry must be black and white 🙂

                              If haveing a hat doesn't work, I may just remove the head all together and just have the shovel and the machete do the talking.

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                              • chrisaakins
                                chrisaakins @braden H last edited by

                                @Braden-Hallett Keep the head. I got it on the first horrified read. I am scared of Penny now. Very scared.

                                Chris Akins
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                                • ArtofAleksey
                                  ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                  Blahaha i love this

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                                  • braden H
                                    braden H last edited by

                                    Work progresses! I may try some other options for the clouds and grey stormy sky 🙂

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                                    • Jonas Zavacky
                                      Jonas Zavacky @braden H last edited by

                                      @Braden-Hallett Love this 😃 Love the emotion in the piece. Your inking is way out there!

                                      I prefer the blank sky tho (in the inking phase). But that's just me 🙂

                                      Looking forward to the result.

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                                      • chrisaakins
                                        chrisaakins @Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                                        @Jonas-Zavacky @Braden-Hallett I agree with Jonas. It is a bit distracting and I don't think it adds to the story.

                                        Chris Akins
                                        www.chrisakinsart.com
                                        www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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                                        • braden H
                                          braden H @Jonas Zavacky last edited by

                                          @Jonas-Zavacky @chrisaakins

                                          Iiiiiiinteresting! I definitely need to play with that sky then. I don't think leaving it completely blank is the answer, but at the same time distracting is no good!

                                          Maybe more leaves, or just a cloud or two.

                                          Thank you both for the feedback 🙂 !

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                                          • chrisaakins
                                            chrisaakins @braden H last edited by

                                            @Braden-Hallett I think if you hatched the whole sky it would work. The negative space clouds compete with your abomination's head.

                                            Chris Akins
                                            www.chrisakinsart.com
                                            www.instagram.com/chrisakinsart/

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