Critique request for book spreads.

peteolczyk

I can’t see it in great detail on the screen I have. But my initial thoughts are just to try a few other Quick colour/value roughs digitally. I’ll have another look when I get home and have a better screen.
Looks really interesting so far.

NessIllustration

@xin-li It's really lovely! I think maybe a gust of wind carrying powdered snow could add extra magic? Maybe some aurora borealis in the sky? (not sure about that one)

As for the watercolor, although it's a lovely idea and would look breathtaking, I think considering the circumstances and the tight deadline you should play it safe here. You can always make your next book in watercolor when you have more time. It's just rather risky with this tight of a deadline. And you don't want to end up having to rush through the last illustrations because you've already used up all you time!

peteolczyk

@NessIllustration @xin-li I reeeally like it.
I agree with Ness. A touch of snowy wisps, faint distant cloud or northern lights (the type you see with your eyes, the milky wispy northern lights, not the photo enhanced, sugar candy lights) might squeeze in a touch more magic.
It’s really good already though.

xin li

@NessIllustration thank so much you for the suggestions. I will try with powdered snow and northern lights.
And thank you for weigh in on the watercolor idea. I think you are right - I might paint one or two from the book after the deadline for my portfolio.
@peteolczyk thank you for the feedback. yes. I think I will try with a subtle northern lights in the background.

xin li

I am working on a couple of pieces at the same time, still working on the Twinkle Little Star spread. I am finishing up another spread and would like to have a second opinion before I present it to the client as the final art. The song is about flowers in early spring. The emotional keywords for this image are "optimistic, warm". The book is for baby and toddlers (0-3 years old)

Does the image fit the keywords?
Anything that is not working for you?

StudioLooong

@xin-li I think maybe it's just the position of the boy's eyebrows but to me he comes off as apprehensive or maybe a bit worried, like a nervous smile. I really like the composition and rendering. The little mice are adorable. I think that maybe it would communicate "warm" better if the overall color of the piece were a bit warmer, the green in the upper right reads as warm to me but at the bottom of the page it starts to get cooler, the yellow is on the cooler side for a yellow and the other flowers are a cool purple, maybe you could just play with adjustment curves a bit or add in some small pink or red flowers to warm it up a hair. I think the combo of them wearing sweaters, the way it looks like the foliage is blowing in the wind, and the cooler green tones make me think of it more of it as a cool or crisp rather than warm - it's really close though.

xin li

@StudioLooong thank you so much for the input. I always find the color green very challenging. I will tweak a bit for the green color, and the flowers.
The expression of the boy is not quite right, now that you pointed it out. I will fiddle a bit more on that.

eriberart

Lovely work! I love the movement of the grass and flowers, it definitely makes me think of a spring morning.
I think, with the girl having such a warm coloured outfit, I might add a few pink flowers as well to balance the image out. I'm not sold on the boy's purple jumper, not sure why but to me it doesn't quite fit (maybe cause there are no other purples?) I would play around with the colour of his jumper.

xin li

Made some adjustments based on @StudioLooong and @eriberart 's inputs. Thank you.

peteolczyk

@xin-li this picture did cheer me up. Lovely

xin li

@peteolczyk thank you. I finally got 2 spreads done, and 12 to go :-).

xin li

I have no clue how much I can share from the book-in-progress. But I really want to get some feedback from fellow artists here before I send in as final art.
Here is another almost finished spread. The song is very energetic, and a bit absurd. It goes something like this "Jump, says the goose. Danse, says the fox. So we jump and we dance, and we sit down".

Any thoughts?

peteolczyk

@xin-li could you delete the post once you have the feedback you need? Just to cover yourself.
It looks really good to me. The only thing I can spot is there seems to be a line either side that cuts off some of the clouds. But I don’t know if there’s a reason for this. Is it due to a fold when it was scanned?

xin li

@peteolczyk thank you so much for letting me know about the line cutting off the cloud. It was a mistake. I rotated the cloud to give the image a bit more dynatic, and I forgot to fix the edge, hehehe. I have been staring this image for too long I guess.

Removing the post sound like a good solution. I will do as you suggested after I get enough feedback. I will of course share some images once the book is out

Laurel Aylesworth

@xin-li Love the music notes on the boy's sweater. Nice touch.

xin li

@Laurel-Aylesworth thank you. I thought it helps to have the boy's cloth with a distinct pattern, as he is the character that appears in every page, and also on the cover. This was the editor's wish - have a character that the little readers can follow throughout the book, even though there is no story plot (it is a collection of classical songs and rhythms)

I actually tried to make him look more gender-neutral. But it seems that everyone thinks he is a boy anyway. I guess maybe it is the hairstyle.

xin li

I am finalizing the Twinkle Twinkle, little star spread.
I have not finished the character and the bed, only put in the flat color to show the value.

I am wondering: Does the landscape work? or is it too busy for this scene?

Currently, I completed 8 spreads, still 6 to go. Based on how much time used for the 8 spreads, I have just enough time to reach the deadline. It is a bit scary. I just hope no one gets flu before the book due day. I have lost so many days during December because of that.

xin li

I am a bit blind towards this spread. I think I call it done for now, and maybe revisit it a couple of days from now. Any thoughts? (keywords: "magical" and "hopeful")

KaraDaniel

@xin-li I think it's wonderful and conveys your keywords!

Chip Valecek

@xin-li stunning piece! I think you nailed both the keywords.