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    • KaraDaniel
      KaraDaniel last edited by

      Here is my idea for the challenge:
      "The tracts in the snow were unlike anything Will had seen before."

      Questions:

      • Is it clear that the yeti is "Will"
      • Does having half of the boys face off the page further suggest he is hiding or should I include his whole face?
      • Overall thoughts for making this a better composition?

      IMG_20200103_222855024.jpg

      Also, I anyone else freaking out about having to paint snow?? I know I am! 😂 Any tips for that would be greatly appreciated!

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      • carlianne
        carlianne last edited by

        I understood that the Yeti was Will and the boy was hiding!

        I think you can choose to crop the boy or show the whole face, but it will help if he is in shadow behind the tree.

        I find cropping the face to be uncomfortable, but maybe that's what you were going for, so it could be okay.

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        • Kali
          Kali last edited by Kali

          I think that this is a great idea! I really like the reversal of what one would normally expect. I enjoy that the boy is in the foreground, I think that is a great compositional element that adds a lot of dimension.

          The face being cut-off at the edge of the page creates a lot of tension, I think that if it were given more surrounding space within the composition it may be easier to read. I’d play around with different possibilities, but I think how you have it now also works with the intended tension of the scene itself.

          Overall, great work so far! I cannot wait to see this completed 🙂

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          • deborah Haagenson
            deborah Haagenson last edited by

            I think the yeti looking at the footprint is so cute! I think as suggested, I would put the boy in shadow, so he doesn't compete with the primary focus of the yeti. I'm not sure why the boy is hiding behind the tree? Is he afraid of the yeti?

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            • deborah Haagenson
              deborah Haagenson @KaraDaniel last edited by

              @KaraDaniel I live in MN, so it didn't occur to me that it would be difficult to paint snow. It will help once you look at references. Maybe look for footprints in snow to see how that looks, if you're unfamiliar with that. My other suggestion would be to pay attention to colors. Maybe a little blue in the snow, depending on the time of day and weather.

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              • TessaW
                TessaW last edited by

                I think it's a great idea and the sketch has a lot of character already. The only thing that throws me off is the scaling of the footprints in perspective. I know you are going for a perspective with lots of depth, but right now it makes it seems like the human has bigger feet than the yeti itself. I think we need at least one foot print in front of the yeti to be smaller than the yeti's own feet and perhaps scale back the current foreground footprint. Just a thought.
                Very well done overall!

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                • Aaron_T
                  Aaron_T last edited by

                  Just a question about the crop on the boys face: will that be the edge of the art board/screen/canvas? I don’t mind him being cropped but for some reason it’s the fact that there’s plenty of paper left over there to show more of him or the tree. You may want to consider not cropping his face directly in half though...maybe show some of his left eye peeking out from behind the tree?

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                  • KaraDaniel
                    KaraDaniel @carlianne last edited by

                    @carlianne thanks for your thoughts! I've decided I'm going to paint his whole face and then that will give me the ability to choose later if I want to crop or leave it. I kind of liked the tension but it may read better with whole face. We shall see!

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                    • KaraDaniel
                      KaraDaniel @Kali last edited by

                      @Kalimostlypaints I think since I have space anyway on the rest of the page I will paint his whole face then decided later to crop or not, thank you for taking to time to give feedback!

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                      • KaraDaniel
                        KaraDaniel @deborah Haagenson last edited by

                        @deborah-Haagenson yes putting him in shadow would be great, I'm going to do a value study here soon and I'll do that. The boy is very scared of Will, hoping he doesn't find him hiding behind the tree. Thanks for your suggestions for painting snow as well!

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                        • KaraDaniel
                          KaraDaniel @Aaron_T last edited by

                          @Aaron_T that was just my extra paper to the right, if I crop that wouldn't be there. I've decided I'm going to paint his whole face and maybe a little more tree of the side and then if I want to crop I can do that later. Thanks for your thoughts!

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                          • KaraDaniel
                            KaraDaniel last edited by

                            So one of my favorite illustrators of all time is Tony Diterlizzi... he did a book last Christmas called The Broken Ornament and I absolutely love the way he rendered snow...here are a couple of examples from the book. I'm going to try to use some of his techniques in my piece. IMG_20200104_205928826.jpg IMG_20200104_205958115.jpg

                            I've done a couple of tests on paper it didn't run out so good...I'm having a hard time making the boy in shadow. oh well, I'll give it a go!

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                            • KaraDaniel
                              KaraDaniel last edited by

                              An hour in...IMG_20200104_231018734.jpg

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                              • Aaron_T
                                Aaron_T last edited by

                                @KaraDaniel Hah ha! I much prefer seeing his whole body like that...Love his expression! Can’t wait to see how it turns out!

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                                • Coley
                                  Coley last edited by

                                  The boy is looking pretty great! Love the shadows on his coat. I love the broken ornament book and I also bought it last year! The reindeer in it are awesome too!

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                                  • KaraDaniel
                                    KaraDaniel @Coley last edited by

                                    @Coley yes, the reindeer are superb!

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                                      KaraDaniel last edited by

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                                      • KaraDaniel
                                        KaraDaniel last edited by

                                        Feedback welcome. I feel like I'm getting close to a finished piece, maybe another couple hours of shading, line work, etc.

                                        Specifically, I was interested in your thoughts on:
                                        -The way I cropped it. I have about 1/2" more of the image on the left and right side. I want the boy to feel sort of cramped hiding behind the tree so I got it pretty close but I can come in closer too.

                                        • The snow...i'm not super pleased but I don't really know how to make it better without possibly making it worse lol.
                                        • My shadows...are they making enough sense? My intention is fro the sun to be coming from the mid-left

                                        And also anything else you see that needs extra attention, I would greatly appreciate 🙂

                                        (FYI this is a pic with my camera phone so it's got some weird shadow on the top and the color is a bit dull compared to the original. I'll scan the final.)

                                        IMG_20200109_135425081.jpg

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                                        • KaraDaniel
                                          KaraDaniel last edited by

                                          Ugh and it's horribly blurry too unless you click on it and blow it up big... I think my camera files are super large...

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                                          • NicolaSchofield
                                            NicolaSchofield @KaraDaniel last edited by

                                            @KaraDaniel This is so great, I'm loving how close we are to the boy's face and his expression is wonderful. You've put us right there with him! The footprints feel a little lost at the mo but I guess they'll be getting some more shading in the final work you're planning.

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