January WIP - SnowyMountain Owl - Process/Feedback

carlianne

Doing final clean and resolving my story points and clarity etc. now.

and my color study

Still happy to hear feedback!

NicolaSchofield

Now you have two owls I think it sort of looks like all the background shapes are owls - just some are facing away. If they're all supposed to be mountains with only two owls then you might want to make them a little more mountain-shaped than the owls.

It might be that you can also achieve the same thing through colour choices if you want them to all be the same shape.

carlianne

@neschof thanks so much for the feedback! I was actually thinking it would be fun if you realize after a second read or so that those mountains are actually all owls, maybe I need to make them look more owly? Or maybe that idea isn't working?

Coley

@carlianne they look owly enough to me! very first quic read one thinks they are mountains but it doesn't take long to realize theyre owls. it is so cute!

Braxton

@carlianne I love looking at this thread and seeing your thought process! A couple of thoughts: In some of the earlier versions I think the inclusion of the little village houses helps convey a sense of relative scale for the owl/mountain/creature, which I’m missing a bit in the latest version. Also, is that a quiver of arrows in the latest version? I’m a little confused about the story and how that ties into it.
For what’s its worth, I think my favorite thumb is the one where your wrote “the mountain has moved into the village...” I think it takes the viewer a second or two to realize the connection between the footprints and the creature, but that’s part of the fun...also there’s something really adorable about that big blobby guy just chillin in the background

carlianne

@Braxton thanks Braxton! Since I made the mountains all actually owls I was worried the houses might feel weird. Like why are there normal houses next to these crazy creatures? But if that doesn't feel weird to you I'll move them back in.

I was thinking the arrows might add tension like he might be trying to track or attack the owl. Obviously he doesn't stand a chance though.

Let me know what you think!

Braxton

@carlianne Random thought: what if he was holding a little baby owl? Either it’s his sidekick, or he’s trying to find the home of a lost baby owl? Maybe that’s what the big owl in the background is looking at him with so much interest. Obviously don’t take this drawing too literally, but I was thinking something like this

carlianne

@Braxton cute I love it!!! ️

Jenna Jenks

@Braxton this is really adorable!

NicolaSchofield

@carlianne said in January WIP - SnowyMountain Owl - Process/Feedback:

@neschof thanks so much for the feedback! I was actually thinking it would be fun if you realize after a second read or so that those mountains are actually all owls, maybe I need to make them look more owly? Or maybe that idea isn't working?

Ah ha! No, if they're all supposed to be owls then they're perfect
I think it was just because on the previous image they were not all owls and I thought this image was the same idea

carlianne

@neschof yes sorry I ended up changing my mind about it! Glad that it is working! I was struggling with what story I wanted to tell in this one for awhile so it's been a little all over the place.

carlianne

Still rough, need to paint the trees, not sure how much time I'll have to tighten things down.

@Braxton I ran with your idea a little bit!

aska

@carlianne Nice! I have one though on the mountains tho. The faraway mountain keeps catching my eyes. Maybe she should be sleeping as well? Just a thought

carlianne

@aska okay I'll try it!

Braxton

@carlianne really cute!

carlianne

Was feeling like it needed more color variation in the foreground and background, and so the owls looked a little different than the snow.

@aska I made the other mountain sleep. Let me know if it is better!

aska

@carlianne defenietly! I would probably also add some atmospheric perspective to the mountains, make them more blurry if you know what I mean. Cool picture tho:)