Critique appreciated - tracks in the snowflake
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@KathrynAdebayo This is looking really nice - i do like the new texture on the paper too. I could be wrong on this but i feel like the background does not match the perspective of the foreground - that the background is too high - i feel like the fireplace should actually tilt down and away from us to the right? I put a quick little box around the folded legs of the child to see if it helped me to see and i think it did - our point of view seems much lower for the child than the background - it feel like the point where the floor hits the wall should be just below the child's shoulder - i am not too sure of this but i though i would share it anyways
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@Kevin-Longueil WOW, thank you so much for mentioning this and for taking the time to draw that box. I see now the discrepancy and will have to adjust things. Thanks again. I love how your January piece is turning out.
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Hi! I do think it has gotten a lot better, especially the boy's face! And the sparkly texture on the snowflake is very nice, too.
I think maybe I'm partly describing what @chrisaakins called airbrushiness. Airbrushiness is usually not caused only by the brush used but also by not being sure where the shadow delineations should fall. Like you said, good reference or a model would probably help a lot. I know it's getting late in the month to start over (I have a cold now and am staring at my own piece ineffectively), but it's all a learning process. And I still think the piece has such a nice theme and atmosphere!
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@LauraA Thanks again for your help! I keep tweaking grandma’s face... I suppose it’ll turn out as well as current capacities allow, and there’s always room for more practice later.
Here’s the current stage of things... Thanks to @Kevin-Longueil ‘s suggestions. Do the legs look any more natural?
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@KathrynAdebayo This looks closer for sure ...it may be that the texture of the carpet the child is on is receding to its own horizon line which is throwing it off a bit still to my eye - When I block out the carpet that the boy is on it seem to be working well - The legs look great!
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@Kevin-Longueil ooh, great catch! It’s so helpful to have other eyes see things I haven’t noticed. I think I’ll try to adjust the rug.
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Maybe the fire should be adjusted so that the highest contrast isn’t at the top of the boy’s head?
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More details... anything stand out as off or missing? Thank you for the help I’ve received with this. I’ve learned a lot of new things about Procreate, which was the goal.
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It's fun seeing the details emerge. What a special, cozy piece!
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@KathrynAdebayo this has really come together. It's a sweet and very different take from what the rest of us did. The snowflake is beautiful. Great job!
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@KathrynAdebayo very nice!:-)
