Comic book development

[phoenix yip]

Hey everyone, I’ve been trying to develop this comic. It’s not totally finished obviously. I was just wondering what are your thoughts on composition, storytelling, perspective... Any advice, or criticism? Any feedback at all would be great!

[Nyrryl Cadiz]

@phoenix-yip Great work! Can you tell us more about it?

[phoenix yip]

@Nyrryl-Cadiz Basically, there's a bounty hunter who is sent out to assassinate that person for committing an act of treason against their lord, and their race. They end up having a motorcycle chase, which leads to the target being shot down.

[jaepereira]

On page two are you showing the hunter pulling the gun out pointing then shooting? Or is the hunter shooting with two hands?

[phoenix yip]

@jaepereira He's just shooting with one hand

[jaepereira]

@phoenix-yip I like the flow but in some cases, like the “pull out gun, then fire gun” example I’d eliminate a panel or two.

[phoenix yip]

@jaepereira Alright, thank you

[phoenix yip]

@jaepereira I redid the panels a little. What do you think? Sorry, the opacity is low.