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    • APHOTICMOTH
      APHOTICMOTH Moderator last edited by

      I personally love the lighting. it's like twilight, and the headlights help indicate that the car is running. I'd imagine most people would have headlights on during twilight as well. Just my opinion, it doesn't mean much. 😛 Wonderful piece.

      All my links: https://APHOTICMOTH.carrd.co/

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      • Kali
        Kali @Zachary Drenski last edited by

        @Zachary-Drenski Amazing work, especially on the coloring. My only critique is that I didn’t see the girl when I first looked at this, but it is otherwise a great composition.

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        • deborah Haagenson
          deborah Haagenson @Zachary Drenski last edited by

          @Zachary-Drenski Thank you for looking at my piece and your suggestions! I am going to play with the things you mentioned. I was concerned sbout the lack of shadows.

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          • xin li
            xin li last edited by

            @Zachary-Drenski I love this piece. The story is funny and unexpected.
            I agree with others about the girl needs to be more prominent. @jbleau 's idea of the big moon is so cool and really fitting with this story. I would try to find a composition to use the big moon to frame the girl (or and the paw) within the moon so she/they get a strong contrast within the image. (hope this make sense).

            Web: www.lixin.no
            IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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            • Phil Cullen
              Phil Cullen last edited by

              @Zachary-Drenski I really like your execution of this, the colours are lovely.

              The first thing that jumps out at me that could be changed if you wanted to would be the paw and arm shape, this is one instance where a rigid straight up arm might help and the paw's fingers could be spread out as opposed to the curve. I only say this as it might help with the feeling of it popping up or you could just tilt the wrist with the palm facing upward. I hope that all makes sense the Gorillaz Clint Eastwood music video springs to mind, screen shot below.

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              www.instagram.com/phillip.cullen/
              www.facebook.com/phillipcullenillustration/

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              • Zachary Drenski
                Zachary Drenski last edited by

                penny’s-dog-final 2.jpg

                Here’s the final (for now) @jbleau and @xin-li I totally agree with the a lot of your ideas, and I think going more night and more moon would have made this piece more halloweeny. However, I am ready to move on to the next piece and didn’t want to go through the major redraws needed to make that happen in a way I’d be happy (I’m slow when it comes to painting recently)

                @Phil-Cullen I drew the paw probably 30 or 40 different ways during the sketch phase and to tell the truth I never found one I was completely happy with. My biggest challenge was having it not look like a cat. I may revisit this in the future but for now it’s time to move on. 😀

                Also just want to say, this forum is great! Thank you everyone, this is definitely my best illustration to date and it’s 100% due to the feedback I got here. Thanks again!

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                • MinasJP
                  MinasJP last edited by

                  One thing looks really cool. 2 visually, use of color choice and angle of this is just perfect. Im speechless !

                  Minas J Polychronakis

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                  • Phil Cullen
                    Phil Cullen @Zachary Drenski last edited by

                    @Zachary-Drenski I feel your pain, I can't draw paws lol I need to do more animal studies. I was just nit picking, it looks great, love the texture and colours. Nice job!

                    www.instagram.com/phillip.cullen/
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                    • xin li
                      xin li last edited by

                      love this piece 👏🏼 👏🏼

                      Web: www.lixin.no
                      IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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                      • jbleau
                        jbleau @Zachary Drenski last edited by

                        @Zachary-Drenski It looks great! Don’t ever look at feedback as direction...Especially from me! It’s just food for thought...It’s always easier to play with someone else’s piece, all the hard work is done. Thanks for posting and encouraging feedback!

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